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Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by L-M-INT, Jun 6, 2003.

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  1. L-M-INT

    L-M-INT New Member

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    these headphones that i put on
    refering my life to the song . that i play
    make it my audio sountrack in my life in everyway
    i escape with my music that i make and create
    forming myself into god and devil in roles i will lay..
    down i jot down my thoughts from patterns 2 the speaches
    life is tastless but the air is what makes it
    i am confused who i am so i keep on writing
    hope i have 1 fan out there listening,and feeling what im sayin
    id rather hear the rain drop than to hear the radio anyway
    how can i find who i really am, when my opinions change
    by the age i age, nothing is never the same
    forever is just a word, when it comes to me
    because i stare so deep i can see the temptation kill everything and die..
    i see the grass give up when theres no seeds or water left.. people dont gasp for that last breath
    relationships end with just 1 sentence
    no matter where i am i repsresent who i am to the fullest
    i dont care if no1 accepts me,imma be who i am till the day im deceased.... look upon everyword of mine as if it was poetry
    find ur meaning of life through the word i sink in through physiology. i will never fit into a line perfictly
    i question everything i hear and see
    im different from everynormal human being, i bring myself joy when im asleep,cuz then im finally in peace away from everything.........
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  2. L-M-INT

    L-M-INT New Member

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    upp a daisy
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  3. Infonation

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    "..forever is just a word, when it comes to me.."-L-M-INT

    Me too homey. I was feelin the vibe off this poem. It reminds me when I sit and my room and try to find something to write about.

    "...look upon everyword of mine as if it was poetry..." -L-M-INT

    I try to talk, using only effective words that hit hard like poetry. You had some outstanding quotes in this passage, I only picked two. Ya got insight blood, and ya cool wit me.

    ^One
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  4. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    First off, don't post all these pieces, because you're flooding it. Wait until at least one or two are off the first page to post another one. It's better to leave the reader in anticipation to see if you may have elevated or see if they'll dig the next one more than the last one you had. Make them curious of what you may bring next, don't just drop all the knowledge that your pen may handle in one night, doesn't make sense.

    Anyway, about your poem, I can completely relate and say that I escape in my own music, my music is my life basically. I always have the headphones on, so I may be able to relate to this line, also..

    "these headphones that i put on
    refering my life to the song . that i play"


    Overall, a nice piece, I must say. I was digging it because I can find something in common with what the writer.. You.. Were saying, and speaking from your own voice. My blessings..
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  5. L-M-INT

    L-M-INT New Member

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    thsnx 4 the reply...... keep replys comin
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  6. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    only two poems on the front page at a time please... once the two poems i leave open hit the second page, i will reopen this one and up it for replies. have a nice day. :)
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  7. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    up for replies
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  8. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    i liked the meaning behind this...i really felt the message. could've been written a lil neater, but all in all not to bad. :)
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  9. varentao

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    This was good.

    It had a simplicity to it that lead the reader through it. Masking the relative complexity. At least, that was the case with me...

    ...resp..
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  10. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    It was kinda hard on my eyes reading this...i think it would be better if you could make it an audio post, because it looks like something you won't catch the concept of unless you hear it from the person writing it.
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