"AlTeRnAtE AsPeCtS" {ft. Illpoetical}

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  1. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    {Illpoetical}
    You ever walk down the block and people look at to you like you a small
    deal
    Their eyes feel like they punching your sense of being right in the
    grill
    Hatred repeatedly encrusting their hearts
    Their grimey assumptions and prejudice ripping psyches apart
    You walk away but feel like running up to them with a sawed off
    Wanting to show them that assumptions will get their noggins blown
    aloft
    It’s like these guys want to reinforce that you are black
    Or Asian, or Indian or Latino just a different cat
    They can all get it when the revolution begins
    When I get mad, the words might not be enough to bring the hatred to an
    end
    I write these lines encrypted with your racist sins
    I’m a poet negro but metaphors can’t cure the chasm in your conscious
    What the fuck am I talking about? Double Conscious?
    These thoughts in my mind are potent like Guinness Stout
    I wonder how people can exist in castles constructed from desecration
    You can never comprehend the number of lives that were destroyed while
    this
    collab was in compilation
    The caged bird that is my aura exists that way because of your hate
    Crooked beliefs are confronted by my pen and made straight
    I’m here to educate you on what it’s like in this skin
    Fighting years of people telling me that they didn’t think I could do
    this
    or that
    I write prolific truths about my people that ain’t got shit to do with
    gats
    Don’t ever forget that whips across backs were the way they broke in
    blacks
    This is exactly why I fucking write
    I’m here talking about racists, and you probably think I’m just talking
    about whites


    {Den-S}
    What’s love but hope disguised as Satan,undercover
    Altogether, forever yet always destroys, clever
    Engulfed through the poisons, mind state unevitable
    Sensitive mountains of despair and forgiveness, indelible
    It’s incredible, the feasible aspects of this feeling
    Overwhelming one’s identity, it leaves one’s senses reeling
    An astronomical asset to life, love is grand, no?
    Until we realize the consequences of hurt, no?
    A sensation of warmth yet cold all at once
    Leaves a couple exposed, personality at front
    So trust becomes the issue, a hypocritical mission
    Because one leaves another if needs aren’t met, dismission
    Confide in the opposite, the positive losses are ignored
    Become a victim of their grace, so you only want more
    That one missing aspect of existence, oh! What a difference
    No one, no thing may prove to be the slightest inference
    So the mind envelops thoughts of movement, of progression
    Because God dropped a gift for his disciple, needless to mention
    But all goes well until the act of reality preys its claws
    And you realize it wasn’t “because” but, more so, for “the cause”
    A human’s flaws render the stars aweless,
    What once was covered in animosity is topless
    So now loneliness reigns supreme, once more
    And tears flood the grains of the carpet floor
    Because you thought they were it, and you were the one
    And now you wonder if you’re able to love anymore…​
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  2. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    yo den your verse was serious i liked the way the collab turned out, if you ever wanna collab again holla at me
    it was tight
    1ne
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  3. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    yeh definitely nice man...dope verse, and we definitely gotta collab again...
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  4. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    lets get some feedback yall...holla...
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  5. Sun_Flower

    Sun_Flower Bluez By Loves Eye

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    I'm sorry my eyes are small as it is and this font is not working for me tonight sorry but will come back and reply ok.
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  6. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    ok if the font is a problem for anyone else, i can change it....


    upp...cmon yall, dont sleep...
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  7. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    i'll give a read, the font a little small for me, sorry...ill read it when its changed
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  8. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    ok sorry bout that...

    fonts changed...
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  9. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    I write prolific truths about my people that ain’t got shit to do with
    gats
    Don’t ever forget that whips across backs were the way they broke in
    blacks - illpoetical

    ^^i think this entire verse should be audio or something..it reads like a rap......it flows nicely....and these two lines are bad ass

    and for Den-S


    What once was covered in animosity is topless

    ^^^ great visuals in your verse such as the example above.....keep it up...
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  10. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    Illpoetical shit was tight sounded a little more like rap but thats cool very nicely done

    Den-S loved the word play and everything all in all a very dope collab nice work yall
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  11. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    thanx...upp
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  12. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    dont sleep people...
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  13. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Damn is everyone dropping sleeping pills around here?...


    This whole thing is dope, you two seem to go together quite well, I really liked the structure and the flow of each verse, tight work ya'll

    much love

    peace



    UP!!!
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  14. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    thanx man..upp
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  15. Royallyraggid

    Royallyraggid New Member

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    The caged bird that is my aura exists that way because of your hate
    Crooked beliefs are confronted by my pen and made straight


    these lines were sweet....

    A human’s flaws render the stars aweless,
    What once was covered in animosity is topless


    i liked that too....

    overall good collab....keep up the good work..

    peace.
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  16. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    thanks for the replies
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  17. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    dope collab u 2...i like how u guys did this one..cant say i've seen a collab like this one in here before.....illpoetical i cant say that i've read u a lot but i'm most def feeling your whole part and den s i liked your flow on your piece..it heard your part well in my head..keep dropin u2
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  18. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    thanx...
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