"allow me..."

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  1. Poetical Techniquez

    Poetical Techniquez Lost in Thought

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    Tasted her beauty.
    It’s dripped all down my hands but yet I’ve never held it but,
    Long to.



    …woman.
    She was but didn’t know beyond her curves that attracted inner boys in men.
    Maturity comes with time but at times it’s a hit and run when;
    Inches mature and passion gives entrance to saturated walls of,
    High whispers that leave beauty marks in backs with no understanding just,
    Lusting infatuation of a vision of love played by two roles of confusion encircled by,
    Games of head games with unintended puns with blunt purposes yet,
    It was so good-pun intended.
    She would lay attached to his unattachments confused by the departure.
    Beautiful pains felt so ugly during the exquisiteness of come and go nights while,
    Street lights would high light his dark side as he faded from view.
    Myriads of questions intoxicated with twice as many emotions spelled both hearts;
    Intertwined to one story with two sides but one told but,
    It was hers that remained unread for months after years of being a woman scorned.



    She was so beautiful.
    Even scars she would hide that they left behind.
    We’ve laid in pools of heavy rain drenched mattresses after the storm and,
    I’ve realized that she gave something special without giving.
    As I lay there with she in my embrace I felt sad for how beautiful she was.
    The only reaction was to sigh in my own confusion of it all the,
    Wonderment of how I touched supple nudity without ever caressing the essence.
    After all this time in her presence I realized that my mind was tired of just sex with her.
    To know what it was like for the sun to rise on her vulnerability,
    Made me vulnerable which became an aphrodisiac to the mind as,
    I stare at her breast rise and fall with breathing.
    The arch of her back so strong so delicate,
    I just had to wake her and make the first move
    …”Allow me to know you, please!!!”
    test
  2. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    This is how it's done. Beautiful. The playing around with words and images, and of course the emotion and poet's inner thoughts shine through. I don't have much to say beyond that. It was well done and one of the best reads I've had in a while.

    BTW..I think we "know" one another unless I have some screennames confused lol
    It's been a while...hope all is well!
    test
  3. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    ....sighssss.....

    lovely lovely loverly!!!

    Very good to see you back! I think this was about me right? right?
    lol
    joking!
    test
  4. SAMARA

    SAMARA truth is a sword

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    sweet piece, good drop.
    test
  5. Poetical Techniquez

    Poetical Techniquez Lost in Thought

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    Thanx all for the love..tis appreciated


    @ la la...yea its me i just have a different s/n now. If u remember really far back u might remember from bolt (as silent medley)


    @ queen...u know its bout u girl lol don't even front!!
    test
  6. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    This was a very strong piece....the message behind it was even stronger...and so sweet and beautiful...the word usage was great as well...overall this was an excellent piece that i thouroughly enjoyed....

    mad love
    test
  7. ~Eloquent

    ~Eloquent Narcissistic....

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    wow man
    it was just so gracefully written....

    Maturity comes with time but at times it’s a hit and run when;
    Inches mature and passion gives entrance to saturated walls of,
    High whispers that leave beauty marks in backs with no understanding just,
    Lusting infatuation of a vision of love played by two roles of confusion encircled by,
    Games of head games with unintended puns with blunt purposes yet,
    It was so good-pun intended.
    She would lay attached to his unattachments confused by the departure.
    Beautiful pains felt so ugly during the exquisiteness of come and go nights while,
    Street lights would high light his dark side as he faded from view.
    Myriads of questions intoxicated with twice as many emotions spelled both hearts;
    Intertwined to one story with two sides but one told but,
    It was hers that remained unread for months after years of being a woman scorned


    got to understand the attachment factor can go both ways
    usually im the one that would be attached to "her" like that
    and i would feel so stupid for allowing it to happen!
    but then the strongest women are the ones that i fall for

    but i can definitely understand how she dont want to let him go
    cuz i definitely had quite a few that i did not want to let go
    though it was so clear those are the ones that i could never have

    attachment can become a scary thing like that
    especially for a physically or an emotionally abused women
    cuz then she refuses to let anyone in
    "all guys are the same"...they'll say
    but shit,sometimes i say and really,honestly,think that all women are the same

    so hard with falling into a dangerous feeling of attachment
    but so extremely hard to live without feeling love and allowing yourself to be loved...
    test
  8. DA-SMOOTHEST-TALKA

    DA-SMOOTHEST-TALKA The Silencer

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    wat up kid? yes sir this again was very nice son again your lines are so well put together and i'm glad to see you postin again son this whole joint was slaming. I'll be postin something pretty soon son school and work consume my time BIG TIME,but i'll be gettin at you pretty soon holla!
    test
  9. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Eloquently written piece man. Being a dude I know how it is to get caught up in somebody's looks before there personality. Everything is so fast paced with us we always seem to forget the inner beauty in people. Great message you came through with.

    One luv
    test
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