Allnakey vs. Deejay Sp1rit

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  1. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Pick 1 out of the 5 Topics listed

    1. You escape from prison. Where do you run to?

    2. If you could be a teacher for one day, what would you teach and why?

    3. Your parents are in the next room arguing, suddenly you hear 3 gunshots. What do you do?

    4. You are a flower. Tell us what it feels like to blossom

    5. It's 3:25 a.m. And you awake to somebody beation no your door. When you open it, the devil is standing there. He tells you it's time to go. What do you do?


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  3. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    I thought there was going to be no topics......... Eh o well, I think I'll manage, checking in
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  4. poeticSCRIPT.

    poeticSCRIPT. National Champs

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    in. best of luck
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  5. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    There is a lot in this piece so read closely... I chose to do number 5


    Willing to try


    Burning wood through the layers of thick smoke
    We’ll all inhale the sickness that looms in the air
    I once was scared of this day, but now it seems natural
    She doesn’t give a fuck; she might have in the past
    But that thought didn’t last and neither did these woods

    Smokey the bear always warned caution
    Who knew the dumb prick was right
    I guess I threw gasoline on the match
    Or my words were what fueled destruction
    Well the world goes round till the world goes round

    Off center is the hole that pierced my heart
    It narrowly missed an instant fatality
    But left me dying all the same, cold in the middle of flames
    As I slowly see a past that had promise
    Or a past promise that was broken to lead me here today

    I gave up hope when I gave up control
    And life became a road with no end
    She once was weary of trusting me
    I assured her it would all work for the better
    Little did I know she would take my trust for granted

    Her betrayal is not at the hands of enemies ends
    Just a curiosity that lacks all explanation and reason
    She always ran her mind clear of distractions
    And all outside influences became aggravated turn offs
    Her run never began….. She set a blaze, on fire till today

    Well the world goes round
    Until a pyro flames apart the wooded structure that breeds life
    And you become a victim of rages product
    It’s too late for god to forgive me now…. Too late
    And the world goes round till the world goes round

    3:25 in the morning when I heard a banging on the door
    She told me today was the day I took a trip
    Just her and me, and if heaven was this sweet, sign me up for hell
    Cause I always enjoyed a bumpy ride
    The devil is life's sinner, but I know my wrongs always been right​
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  6. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    ok, I remember talking to you about this piece sorta. You was talkin about the rhyme scheme and not using one, well believe me, you didn't need it for this one anyway. It's definitely different from the other pieces I've read thusfar about the devil...keep it up...
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  7. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    winner=allnakey
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  8. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Ha, lucky bastage! lol...congrats here...
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  9. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    Word.....Allnakey's was clearly more thought out!....

    lol
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  10. Quintin_Warden

    Quintin_Warden Online Terrorist

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    umm where the hell is the other guys poem???
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  11. DIVINITY FLOWZ

    DIVINITY FLOWZ New Member

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    why is this still open...

    shouldn't yall be posting this weeks tournament survivors..
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  12. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    ^you pick this one out of the bottom? To ask this?
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  13. DIVINITY FLOWZ

    DIVINITY FLOWZ New Member

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    thought maybe yall didn't see it
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