-All Cried Out-

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  1. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Hypnotic blue seas,
    Lay on water staring at stars before sleep
    Unfortunately insomnia kept me from the try,
    Against a rocky shore,
    Cold wind blows against my eyes
    Picturing a familiar face,
    Except now he resembles an angel
    Stepping down from heaven he takes a look at me,
    The last time we spoke we wished one another well
    One quick smile and I find myself reaching out,
    One quick second and I find myself all alone
    When I am strong they are weak,
    When I am weak others are there to help make better of me
    I let the love ease away all of the fed up pain,
    Continue on my search for brighter days
    The time never seems to run out,
    Until a tragic accident brings your world to a sudden halt
    The earth keeps on spinning though,
    No matter how many times other say it's not,
    You can't help but convince things are all of your fault
    How many more are to be taken before it is me?
    They say don't count the days, make the days count
    Sometimes I wish I don't have to look into the mirror and see hurt eyes,
    Just paint a happy face but I'm tired of acting,
    I'm all cried out.


    This is nothing new, haven't written in about a week lol. This one's dated January 10, 2004.
    -Peace & all Love
    test
  2. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    Damn ms...this was really hot...i loved every bit of this piece...when i first looked at the title i knew i would love it...this was defiently a piece that i can relate to...there are so many lines i want to qoute i dont know where to start...

    Unfortunately insomnia kept me from the try,

    One quick smile and I find myself reaching out,
    One quick second and I find myself all alone

    I let the love ease away all of the fed up pain,
    Continue on my search for brighter days

    No matter how many times other say it's not,
    You can't help but convince things are all of your fault

    They say don't count the days, make the days count
    Sometimes I wish I don't have to look into the mirror and see hurt eyes,
    Just paint a happy face but I'm tired of acting,
    I'm all cried out.

    this poem was really great...i really enjoyed this piece...it flowed so well that i found myself reading it out loud! Not only that but i myself was goin to write a poem with the same title just a few days ago!! This was a really great piece!

    mad love
    test
  3. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    I liked it too, can't relate too much except for the Insomnia thing...I suffer severely from it, lol...anyhow...this was a nice little story you got goin here...get back to writing though...keep ya sword sharp...
    test
  4. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Yea nice little story for real, I was feeling this, shit I feel everything you write, It all is painted so crystle clear and said in a way that just keeps in interested. It's hard to smile when you have nothing to smile about, I have learned that over the years and after a while you do get tired of it and you just need to cry out. I loved this piece and you are just continuely dropping nice works. I wish I had this kind of consestency.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
    test
  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    You got str8 to the point with this. Nice job. I swear everytime i read your work i think i'm reading misspimp work. Vica Versa

    one luv
    test
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