AIM Collab Feat NOBLE & Galatea

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by NOBLE SOLDIER, Jul 19, 2012.

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  1. NOBLE SOLDIER

    NOBLE SOLDIER Fireball Kid

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    Noble
    Its strictly forbidden for anyone but me to complete this mission..
    Because the end result will leave everyone else covered in crimson..

    Gal
    red, the blood of the dead that will cover his head,
    while she lurks wanting to get ahead of his fury instead

    Noble
    Less'n the death by begging for mercy, I think not bitch..
    Meet'n me was your curse, because I control the death switch..

    Gal
    Death stares all around, there's no way I'm backing down now;
    even with army in the hands of the enemy I'll force you to retreat or it'll be the death of me

    Noble
    Rest In Peace, Nah i'd rather you suffer and drown in the river styx..
    Getting raped by Lucifer and be forced to suck a million sinners dicks..

    Gal
    I'll rest once you're corpse's rotting from trees, why bleed when flesh falls off when you breathe,
    each gasp swifly taken away, I'm the one emperor that's here to remain.

    Noble
    Its always the same, people wanna gather around me and hang on me like ornaments..
    When most of yall faggots could get close to me with a gps and exact cordinants..

    Gal
    Before you'll turn around I'll have you hit the ground,
    the samurai in you is nowhere to be found so I'll offer you the easy way out..

    Noble
    Gal may be merciful, but im a shinobi thru and thru without a doubt..
    A sword through your chest and and kunai in your throat so u cant shout..

    Gal
    Silly Shinobi going against 5th Mizukage, you'd need a new rhyming design to murder me over a punchline,
    not gonna happen this time, get back before I'll bitchslap you back to your line.

    Noble
    I recieved a sign from Mars the GOD of war, He told me to end this..
    Because leaving you alive would just disgrace your decendens..
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  2. MrFlux001

    MrFlux001 Member

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    Hmmm, i'm one for rhyme scheme's or something resembling one at least, and this was all over the place. Didn't help that each person had different rhyming words, would have liked to see some consistency and work off each other's bars to make it a true collaboration. Additionally, I have no fucking idea what you were all writing about.
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  3. GaLaTeA

    GaLaTeA GymArt

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    Ty for your feedback, it's much appreciated. :)

    Content-wise it's about two "samurais" going against each other.
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