Aggravated.

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by mr.redeyez, Jun 28, 2013.

  1. mr.redeyez

    mr.redeyez Member

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    Fuck fame family is more important
    threw the rain and the pain they supported
    I'm a walking miracle if my memory ain't distorted
    I Remember conversations that Satan would've avoided
    its about a baby being aborted, but I was born
    fought my way threw the thorns they use to call me retarded
    dragged my name threw the forest I wish I could've recorded
    every word that was spoken, those sick minded individuals
    thank the lord I ain't broken, now they miserable criminals
    I hate holding grudges and sending shots so subliminal
    but they made me an animal cold blood were my minerals
    I would cry during church services and laugh during funerals
    this road to recovery is bugging me, my mental and physical
    State, isn't great I get so anxious and furious
    Fate and Fear is fun you better take me serious
    Swear my goal is riches to get it i turn insidious
    like jekyll and hyde, my personality divide
    ever seen a handsome prince turn hideous
    where I reside my city is,, infested with crime
    copped a forty-five on some gritty shit, I invested in nine
    they all mine,I'm chopping shit,bullets hit like a karate kick.....
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  2. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    raw opening half man, felt that...some realness in this piece that ain't hidden in cryptic symbols, straight forward to the point, that's fresh man, not alot of people can deliver that way...I can't really. Don't know if this was inspired by real life, if so keep yo head up man...and to offer some words...right now, here is not the end all be all.. if you looking to colab on a concept shoot me a message...would like to work with ya on something if your down. or if you have some ideas for me to expound on concerning the texts, im always looking for ideas...

    anyhow, good OM drop
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  3. mr.redeyez

    mr.redeyez Member

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    thanks for the feed back and yeah we could collab I'm a inbox you
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  4. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    fire flow once again red i always liked your shit keep spittin on these bitch ass niggaz son
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  5. Maskil

    Maskil Last Gunslinger of End-World

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    my favorite bar is "I Remember conversations that Satan would've avoided"....very nice man
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  6. LFAmbidime

    LFAmbidime New Member

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    This is raw. It's good yet it seems like it's mashed together. "but they made me an animal cold blood were my minerals"

    I read that all together and read it like "but they made me an animal cold, blood were my minerals/"

    You could make it like "but they made me an animal eatin' cold blood as my minerals"

    Sounds good though bro hope you can give me some feedback on my up-coming post.
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  7. chuhks

    chuhks New Member

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    "Ever seen a handsome prince turn hideous"

    I love dat

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  8. johnkav

    johnkav New Member

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    Very deep I love the animalistic comparisons, very well thought out nice rhymes too

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