This is my first post on here and i'm doing it just for the hell of it. I've been a member for a while and i love reading the poetry you guys have seeing that there are a lot of really great poets here! Seriously you guys, tell me exactly what you think is wrong with this cuz i want to do what i can to correct myself for future poetry for myself. Hope you guys like it! It's called "A Superhero's Love". Btw, this is a tale about me and my ex g/f...yeah a sad one! I was thinking of Superman when i was writing, that's why it's written like this! Actually, more of a freestyle...ok i need to shut up so u can read it! "A Superhero's Love" We were once and unbeatable team Ready to set it straight against anyone Breaking down all that came against us Shutting out the opponent They all knew we were the greatest Knowing of our awesome love for each other Until that one day Our worse emeny showed up... We fought for months saving "our" world It seemed like the days lasted forever With every brutal blow straight to the heart I thought i was out for sure But in the end... Only one of us became the victor We won the fight But you lost the struggle As i begin to feel the pain from the fight It wasn't at first i noticed this But the signs were sure there Always questioning me Asking if we were the right "team" The list went on and on I didn't know of it until you literally tripped out Using your loving powers you had before Into hate and frustration...on me That's when i knew we weren't one You left in hopes of healing your wounds Telling me everything will be fine And that you will see me again I didn't want you to leave But i know it was for the best Knowing that we will fight justice again Everything was fine You were starting to make progress Things were looking up for us Until you supposeively heard things Things that were a complete lie Which made all that work you had Simply go away The thought of it bringing out that evil Firing off wanting to kill me And later finding another evil to "partner" with I guess the pain from the fight before Was an everlasting one That pain was far worse then you can ever imagine I tried to get you to the side of good Failing in every attempt i did But never giving up continuing my everyday struggle Then you delivering the final blow Telling me to listen to "Lonely" Saying that when i hear it Know that i will never have you back Damn...way to take away my powers for good You've been causing a rant with "evil" ever since Trying to do what i can to stop you But to no avail So the distruction lives on I sit and think of ways to get you back As the months have come and gone With your terror living on Thinking of the times that we have had Living life as that unstoppable team And breaking down everytime to the thought of you Heroes don't cry What the hell is going on Oh that's right... My powers are gone I hope in the time to come I can find a way to get you back Saving the "world" not as a hero to everyone else But to my one and only partner My sidekick, my best friend And the one i love, all wrapped up in one Again, let me know what you think and thanx for reading this. Hope to hear from you guys soon!