A Rose

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by mumblez, Jun 17, 2003.

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  1. mumblez

    mumblez New Member

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    This is a different style of poem for me...If you readin this please reply with what you think.. ~1
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    A Rose . . .

    a beautiful object, that often relates to love or passion
    its smell most beautiful, able to give the senses a deep sensation
    which runs throughout the body; a feeling of ecstasy
    similar to a human, it has life, it can grow and die,
    if there was a rose that could show emotion, it'd probably cry,
    its tears stay within, flowing through its veins and stem,
    it's petals would wither, darken, lose their color
    it's sense would be gone, the water in the vase, would darken
    and become cloudy
    the green leaves would then fall off, to the ground,
    slowly, while the petals dry out soon after, becoming crisp
    it's dead, lost its life
    its now the end of something so beautiful, given from a man, to his wife
    test
  2. disciplestylez

    disciplestylez Broken Soul

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    i liked that alot. It showed alot of emotion, and i could picture the rose through its journey....nice piece!
    test
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    nicely written piece, flowed very well

    one luv
    test
  4. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    shit was tight nice flow
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  5. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i like it....nice to see when people do stuff unlike they usually do...i dont get outside the box to much...stick with what works good for me...but i should deffenitally try more stuff....i like......keep it up
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  6. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    i dont think ive read any of ur pieces , so this is a first for me...i like different pieces.....sometimes we get used to reading alot of the same thing...but anyhow....nice imagery, and usage of words...seemed a little short .....mos def waiting to read other pieces from u..

    ~one love~
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  7. mumblez

    mumblez New Member

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    i think that there is one still on here, yuo just have to goto the next page to see it.

    thanks everyone for replying

    uppin

    ~1
    test
  8. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    Very nice...i got a special relationship with 'the rose'...so it made it even more hard hitting..and harder to comment on...

    ...nothing else to say...

    ...resp...
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  9. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    i don't know exactly how you meant for this to be interpreted, but i know the way i saw it and i loved it..interseting story like poem, something that gets you thinking
    test
  10. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    im the same way......im always on some "woe is me" type shit lol


    i liked this piece....
    "its tears stay within, flowing through its veins and stem,..."
    ^^^
    good sutff
    test
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