a poem to my best friend..

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  1. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    me and my kat ( she is a female by the way) we used to sit on the corner of our hood and look up at the midnight sky. My best friend always stared at the brightest star and made a wish. We all know wishes are kept secret...damn I wish I could be like that Mel gibson movie- able to read minds. Anyway, we grew up in the same hood and both our street are no outlet so it was always quite when we would be sitting on the corner talking about life. . . she's a good friend that kept my faith on point and helped me realize the importance of a womans mind is.

    I wrote this piece for 28 year old K_RED a Master's Degree holder in sports med,......... holla

    (r)
    You stare
    You wish
    You smile

    It exist in shadows bounded by gases
    But you still can see it clear even through our malaises
    It goes dim then it mystifies you with a glare of satisfaction
    And you know it will always be there. . .

    The illumination of its existence holds you mystified
    It’s the bright eye in the sky
    darkness surrounds the fire of wishes
    I no longer wonder why you made desires

    I always will wondered about these aspires
    The way you think
    The way you pray
    The way you love (one’s heart not flesh)
    The way you stay close but so distant

    Almost like the bright eye in the sky
    Take that for instance
    You know the one
    The one that hesitates to answer your wishes
    I ponder why
    I pause to think why. . .

    You stare
    You wish
    You smile
    test
  2. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    man true beauty i really like that
    u tried a new style i seen a lot of styles but
    i like this one very nice beautiful wording nice piece def keep writinggg
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Feelin this alot, you have a very unique style. Welcome to the realm

    one luv
    test
  4. D.B.

    D.B. Death

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    liked dis...worth tha read...keep doin' u n' stay up...nice piece kid
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  5. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    MisterEThoughts
    Poet At Heart
    D.B.
    DeathBlow
    Mind~$oul
    ~The Blaq Poet~

    I wrote this to my best friend.... In a e-mail..I have not heard back from her yet... I was wondering what her response would be.... It seems that it will be good considering how all the above talent responsed...

    thanx
    I'll be sure to drop another one soon until then......
    test
  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    this was a really nice piece...most def feeling it from top to bottom
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  7. Swiss Miss

    Swiss Miss New Member

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    I liked this one too. You've got talent...nice work.

    Lauren
    test
  8. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    i was feelin this....nice piece

    mad love
    test
  9. Wicked5744

    Wicked5744 Last I awoke, it was morn

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    I'm with Mind. This style is very unique and I like it. New form to the Realm. Welcome. Keep the ink flowin...peace.
    test
  10. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    lpoet
    misspimp
    Wicked5744
    Swiss Miss





    Thax for the read and thanx for the welcome..
    I hope to read each and everyone's poems.
    I know I will be inspired to write
    my pain
    my sorrow
    my bliss
    6ftground
    test
  11. 6ftground

    6ftground BLACKACE/GRIMREADER

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    I'd like to thank all the people who took the time to read this piece...THANK YOU!!!
    test
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