A Dark Day {End of Days}

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  1. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    Cloud number 9, covering the entire earth

    Blinded, i'm in search, for what a real life is worth

    Cursed, because their chains and change won't change their ways

    But I hunger for things, that will change my days

    An eclipse of days, with no sun rays

    Life is cut short like a paraphrase

    Black is beautiful, but this black creeps deadly

    Steadly I stand, with my palms imboard and ready

    Prepared to face the light, i'm the last one standing

    Planning what to do when the moon starts its landing

    Until then I preside on this evacuated planet

    Just me, my siloquette, chrome mic and granite

    Amongst the stars, the peoples new home is Mars, i'm all alone

    I move threw ghost towns, and cities with a heart of stone, and a microphone

    At the Falcon's Dome, i'm home, i'm finally found

    Open my eyes, take my headset off, the world if full of sound

    It's just a state of mind, when your underground

    A Dark Day of drizzle, rain, and silence

    I write words of love, peace, hate and violence

    I'm no M.C., i'm an underground writer, a prize fighter

    Fuck rap, when it comes to info, i'm a marter

    A hardcore, city born, fire starter

    Its been a Dark Day for hip-hop, everyday, in every way
    test
  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "Black is beautiful, but this black creeps deadly"

    cold ass line man. Beautiful wordplay and nice message in this. Feeling ya work

    one luv
    test
  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Yes, I agree with Soul.. I'm feeling your work, as well as your format, because it's quite easy for the reader to read. I also agree with the line he chose, very deep and indepth into what you were trying to say, your true meaning of this piece you were writing..

    "Black is beautiful, but this black creeps deadly"

    Fantastic line, but I'll keep reading your pieces from here on out, some great material. My blessings..
    test
  4. TheWrittenWord

    TheWrittenWord New Member

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    Expressive; you sounded hungry and tired. I liked the "Life is cut short like a paraphrase" simile. Very well done.
    test
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