A Bad Rapper

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  1. TrufDXaggerator

    TrufDXaggerator New Member

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    A Bad Rapper


    No matter wut clothes I have on old or tattered molded battered
    Im still a Bad rapper
    No matter how I dress neat or fresh seemin to impress
    Im still a Bad rapper
    Whether im mild as a child wit a doll wit a juvenile smile and a childish style
    Im still a Bad rapper
    Whether Im bein deceiving being a being of delinquents scheming
    Im still a Bad rapper
    Whether Its peace ive chosen as my angle speaking teachings as golden angles
    Im still a Bad rapper
    If Im shady insane deranged wit a crazy membrane
    Tane is still a Bad rapper
    If I pop and blaze hot as the flame it takes to rock cocaine
    Tane is still a Bad rapper
    If Im cold as a stroll in da N.Pole walkin in snow zero below wit no clothes in open toes
    Im still a Bad rapper
    If Im from a past where laughs were last and wraths tha path
    Im still a Bad rapper
    And if I see a future we should move towards as people beautiful
    Ill Be A Glad Rapper
    Peep Truf
    Truf tha Xaggerator aka Hipnkritikal
    Scream at ya Dawg wit feedback or criticism
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  2. built for Life

    built for Life New Member

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    i thought this piece was great.....no offense....i believed it completely....it just worked because it felt so honest....."If Im shady insane deranged wit a crazy membrane
    Tane is still a Bad rapper"......i mean the irony in that is too much.....you use these played out rhyming words to describe yourself, but then you rlike im still a bad rapper.....mad props for the clarity to reflect on yourself in if it is in a self-deprecating life....remember you might be a good poet
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  3. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    yeah i like this peice to, was very honest and in a way kinda had me smiling the whole peice, cos i felt that this was you...if you get me? but i liked the repition, like no matter what you do or how u appear your still a bad rapper

    nice work
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  4. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    i liked the idea of this......
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  5. VersatileSidra

    VersatileSidra Rest In Peace

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  6. Kayser Soze

    Kayser Soze Cigmas worst nightmare

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    I always wanted to be good rapper, but im still a bad rapper,
    But I'm not a bad actor so I'm clapping like it matters.
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  7. TrufDXaggerator

    TrufDXaggerator New Member

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    Apreciate tha feedback.Only hopes of acceptance brings a turtle out his shell.THANX
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  8. TrufDXaggerator

    TrufDXaggerator New Member

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    uppin 4 tha lat time.would like lpoets feedback.
    !mpulsive Scream at ya Dawg im ready to descend upon the realm like traveling angels.
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  9. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    I must be trippin cuz I think if you wrote a rap verse like this without the "badrapper" repitition it would be pretty dope, just the style of it. I guess being a rapper and producer might make me look at things different. Anyway it was dope.

    Much love

    peace
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  10. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    I usually dont quote from the poems themselves, but that line hit home...positive energy activates constant elevation...Also known as peace...something that we as a people need to strive to achieve...anyway, thanx for checkin me out...You got skillz...keep em sharp like the razor they are now...
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  11. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    a man you got too many piece up on the board. Only 2 at a time

    one luv
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  12. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    u want it u got it....

    overall i thought the piece was decent but i do like your other poems better...never been a fan of repetitive type pieces...but u played it well.....kinda of a woe is me feel to it..but u didnt drag it out or over use it....only prob i had with the piece is that u always leave shit at the ends of your pieces, and u dont seperate it from your pieces....tape enter a couple times so it doesnt run with the poem...lol......nice drop..oh and u know i gotta keep it closed b/c u already got 2 on the first page...
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