53. Urizen VS 54. Wrongmakeswrite

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by TeKneeK, Jul 26, 2003.

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  1. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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  2. Urizen

    Urizen Guest

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  3. wrongmakeswrite

    wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end.

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    pick your own.. & it's wrongmakeswrite.. no capital..
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  4. wrongmakeswrite

    wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end.

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    8. Write a SERIOUS but very sexy, sensuous story of you and your girl making love.

    now it wasnt spiced nicely - it wasnt special recipe..
    it was just pure - purely showed the best'a me..

    it was casual beginnings, an aquaintance made..
    it was just LIKE AT FIRST SIGHT- but a date was made..
    took her to the park, walked & sipped lemonade..
    talked about life, the snow, & the ocean's waves..
    the sun was bathed in the smiles & the games we played..
    she impressed me - i impressed her & we was both clean shaved..
    never rant nor rave, this chick was a babe..
    from her face to her smile to the muscles in her legs..
    she was perfection to the strong hearted..
    a projection of an angel harp-ed - it was great & love was started..
    reguardless of popular belief, we were made to be..
    i was made to see, this girl - like a soulmate to me..
    hold if i was late, never got upset..
    never said any lines of anger, nothing to regret..
    but yet, it wasnt planned there was no betty crocker..
    now i'm imagin wrinkles & pastures, talkin in matching rockers..
    of course there's cock blockers - checkin the skins..
    but i knew, she knew - they were just like most men..
    always walked - never sped up to run..
    just took a dash of hope, a sprinkle of fun..
    set it on high, 2-3 months it was done..
    i would pay for the grub - but she'd payback with a hug..
    forget sexual acts - we went to the kitchen to make love..

    .. i went 25
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  5. Urizen

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    9. A sudden stinging thrust lunges your right ribcage... as you gasp and gaze at your friends at a party... and you clutch your right side.... discovering you been shot... and as you began to fall ... just before you hit the floor... your entire life flashes before your eyes... and you see your friends running for you as you begin to fall....... what did you flashback to before you hit the ground... dead

    let me just walk away I dont need beef today//
    I came to the party to dance chill and play//
    why the hell this dude actin all rude//
    didnt know it was his chick but I aint gun let him ruin my mood//
    ..............................bang................................
    shit a gunshot I aint waiting for the body to drop//
    the fear in my body must be the reason why my right side feel so hot//
    I still gotta move why aint my legs running//
    as I look down I see my body is gussing//
    blood...its soaking my shirt//
    Im about to die but why doesnt it hurt//
    it must be the shock that paralyzed my body//
    as I lose my eye sight I see everybody running for me//
    as I grab my wound everything goes black//
    certain memorys enter my mind as Im about to fall to my back//
    why did I have to scream at my mother//
    why wasnt I never nice to my little brother//
    always had to say no and get out my room//
    I hope that isnt how he remembers me as I now travell to the moon//
    from all the females I used and abused//
    to all those who wanted to love me but I refused//
    I now leave this earth not knowing what love was about//
    no this cant be but I dont have enough air in my body for me to shout//
    as I feel my body giving it up//
    a light emerges from nowhere and lifts me up//
    as I open the door in front of me I see nothing but flames//
    and I hear a thousand screams scream a thousand names//
    as the door locks a voice welcoms me home//
    a smile on my face cus eventho I am where I am I know now I will never be alone
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  6. wrongmakeswrite

    wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end.

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    i liked your last bar.. nice ender.
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  7. Urizen

    Urizen Guest

    thnx I like the way you playd with
    your words
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  8. wrongmakeswrite

    wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end.

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  9. Ruthless Mic

    Ruthless Mic New Member

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    Vote = Urizen

    He had the better verse outta the 2. His imagery wa slusted very specific besides the other cat's piece imagery was not found which lost my interest, therefore my vote goes to urizen.
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  10. wrongmakeswrite

    wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end.

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    i didnt know imagery was all that mattered?
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  11. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    correct me if im wrong.. but URIZEN --- arent u late posting ur verse?
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  12. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    neva mind ur ok.
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  13. wrongmakeswrite

    wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end.

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    just check the time zone of the board.. or atleast the board where i am is on central time.. meaning he posted at 12:28 which is 28 minutes late.. whatever you wanna do.
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  14. Urizen

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    ^^ dont do that son
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  15. wrongmakeswrite

    wrongmakeswrite the streak wont end.

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    if rules are rules.. then you gotta follow em..
    .. i'm leavin it up to them though - cause i dont care
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  16. Urizen

    Urizen Guest

    I was on time
    if u dont care than dont
    let him doubt that
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  17. djtactics

    djtactics New Member

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    wrongmakeswrite: Your approach on this topic was unique, though I didn't really get it until the ending! FLow was on for the most part... you could have made your piece a little longer and more involved, but either way it wasn't bad.

    Urizen: Your piece was pretty good too... some of the lines in there are quality, especially the last one... I think that you could have made yours a little longer too, and that it would have been better. Your flow was not as good as wmw's, and your story wasn't as involved IMO...

    ...so my vote goes to wrongmakeswrite
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  18. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    tie both win.
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