5. Stony Vs 6. Tha Talent

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  1. Nebz

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  2. Tha Talent

    Tha Talent , Tha Master.

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    hi.
    i'm not going to have enough time to put a lot of effort in
    but i'll show
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  3. stony

    stony ladies sit on grampas lap

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    this is your rematch...make it hot. one.
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  4. Tha Talent

    Tha Talent , Tha Master.

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    the night was crisp and cold - Jack Frost winked his eye
    the air was suffocated with snow, as white sheets split the sky
    but i stayed pacing - leaving depressions from my depression
    grasping my oily picked out afro'd hair as i was tested
    - and stressing...a gaze colder and coarser than the air it pierced
    up through to apartment 6B - stare impared by tears
    but the tears - so much more than from frost and bite
    i lost the fight - now i long to right the wrongs in life
    "stay strong through spite" - the words mom left me with
    now she's strapped to an IV and i'm strapped to pestilence
    a fettered mess - the doctors say one shot hit her kidney
    one shot hit her right calf and one shot split her wrist clean
    one shot hit me though - not a bullet wound - a shot no heat could shoot
    its the same shot that leaves me pacing through the streets at two
    its the same shot that has me wailing - failing to reconcile
    the same shot that leaves me exposed as i undress all smiles
    the gangs - the slum life - the drugs, hype - so dumb, trife
    the echoes - she told me to get a love life and love life
    but did i listen? - no, now i'm lost trying to follow a crumb trail
    stuck pacing the murky swamplands in search of dove tails
    ...
    looking back at a trail of one set of footprints in the sand
    i recollect - memories of this past day - so crude but worth a glance
    ...
    it had been a long day - and as the song wanes - it's Billie Holliday
    evening was closing in, and i just had walked away
    from the dinner table to go get dressed for a big date tonight
    threw on a button down and jeans, picked the fro to sway just right
    i heard momma give a yell from down the hall, callin me - "Puddin'..
    ..i'm going to the store," usually my chore but tonight i couldn't
    so i fixed my hair some more, Wu Tang blastin in the background
    heard the door slam - but got my laces fastened up and hat down
    flipped my cell open to call just to say i'm bout to pick her up
    but Crystal wasn't their - so i guess my wish got bumped
    cos her sister said that she had more important things to do
    kinda pissed, but fuck it - i'd rather torch it with my crew
    - pulled up to Big Bennies, they talkin like somethin's goin down
    a couple Latin Kings got the word that's floatin 'round
    how some kids is gonna pull a drive-by on Jon-Jon's Grocer
    didn't connect the dots to see that's where my moms would go to
    ...
    and now she and Jon Jon are both skidding by on life support
    i'm catch blackness strictly, tried to look to the bright side first
    but couldn't find one - and the snow is getting deeper now, its colder
    take a break in the pavilion, the snow creaping down is frozen
    so i take out my agression on icicles - snapping the sharp shards
    my mind - a racing standstill - speeding past parked cars
    - then i stopped -
    voices - two voices, different sexes
    couldn't see their faces but i could hear them talking - pressing
    speaking of the days news - the shooting - i drew nearer to hear their mumbles
    "a shame" - "if i'd have known" - but then something burst clear the bubble:
    "i had really liked her - we should have never done it" "but its done and.."
    i didn't let the man finish his sentence - grabbed my gun and..
    i blasted ------ caught the shoulder of the bitch first
    shot her again - caught a glimpse of the face - it was CRYSTAL!
    i guess she ditched me to go to town on my mom - i was amazed
    dropped the pistol - fell to my knees - completely dazed
    her dying scream - "PLEASE FORGIVE ME!" - her leather coat soaking in blood
    the last thing i saw - the man she was with lowered his gun
    ...
    ...
    in a world of angry souls and backstabbers - thus sparks the pillage
    and the only ones to stay alive are cold hearted killers
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  5. stony

    stony ladies sit on grampas lap

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    i sit back, trapped in a past that rots a mind draped in black
    happiness taunts a man as pain fills a flask in hand, a relapse
    an unreachable grasp grabs a chill and snaps down a spine
    when i relax i find his face smilin, his laughter echoes in mind
    sanity resides, i lose myself rememberin past times reminiced
    the thought to exist without you, i couldnt handle it, i gave in
    it was too tragic, i collapsed quick constantly relivin a moment
    a life alterin event grows within, turnin hidden emotions frozen

    a blue sky graced the day, birds chirpin as my brother played
    hot wheels and car noises dazed his ways with a smile on face
    a vigourous life portrayed and an inquizative phase displayed
    an innocence erased, his race car raced astray, he chased away
    a couple minutes drained before i noticed all the sudden guiet
    an alarm, a silent siren blared in mind, my heart paced into a riot
    frightened i find my bro walkin the street unaware of a car coming
    i began running, my pulse thumping in terror and blood rushing
    brakes screeching as the air turned dead, i stopped breathing
    an impact pointblank seen, he flopped off the ground, blood splashing
    i fell to my knees, screamin prayers in hopes to see a life retreived
    the driver already quickly dialing as tears proceed to bleed from me
    the ambulance arrived, hooked him up, and strapped him for a ride
    i watched 'em try, but its to late, my 3 year old brother died that night
    and its all my fault...

    ...i stand here appalled, living proof of a fatal flaw
    constant pain cursin thru all, every waking moment is seen in all
    i dont wanna relieve the thought, i just want my lil brother back
    the fact his life ended so quick and tragic, im mad at myself for that
    thats why im stranded in thought, caught 6 stories up, starin down
    facing my truths, my acute pain fused thru internal wounds bound
    i face the ground, my everything and the only thing i could face now
    to drown my sorrow in concrete, weep my loss out loud, i shout avow
    but all i found was the sound of wind, as guilt dripped from my chin
    glarin thru the sin of suicidal intent, i just cant forgive what i did
    i tiptoe to the edge, treading thoughts to catch a glimpse of peace
    but when the serenity settles with ease, all i see is the fatal scene
    i begin to lean and dream of him in gods graces, overlooking me
    and seeing the torture his death gave me, i quickly begin falling
    im sorry, i cant sleep at night knowing that i ended your life
    but before i die, remember forever, i love u, my only brother ty...

    thud...



    topic...
    im about to jumpoff a skyscraper and plummet down....what goes thru my mind? since i have no skyscrapers where i live, imma jump off a tall building.
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  6. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    vote=ThaTalent

    this was a nice battle but i feel Talent got this one, pretty easily...

    He had me reading the whole way through...his flow was impeccable, vocab was hot and his imagery was tite...had some nice multis, mostly in the first few paragraphs, which helped the flow run smoother...from the opening bar I knew it was hot...
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    its the same shot that has me wailing - failing to reconcile
    the same shot that leaves me exposed as i undress all smiles
    the gangs - the slum life - the drugs, hype - so dumb, trife
    the echoes - she told me to get a love life and love life
    ===========================

    ^^^^ my fav lines....

    Stony had a nice drop, but few multis and his vocab and imagery was alright, but not as good as Talent's....Talent painted a more clearer and precise picture of his storyline, and Stony's was more original and not as creative...nice drops from both tho
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  7. Tha Talent

    Tha Talent , Tha Master.

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    uppers like drugs
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  8. Papa_Smurf

    Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi

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    I liked both pieces well, however I'll have to give this one to Talent, the story was told incredibly, and it all pieced together very well

    Both did a good job however

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  9. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    Up over No Shows
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  10. Adolf Spitler

    Adolf Spitler I am homo hear me roar

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    gotta be the nicest match this week, stony definetely had emotional value and flow down pat, but talent's wordplay and just use of vocab amazed me, it played out perfectly and just described it well enough for me to get a complete image of what was going on


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  11. MC4SiGHT

    MC4SiGHT JOE COMMiSSO

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    vote-the talant

    great verse, great story prob best verse this week...great imagery and everything...stony came real nice also but the length and the larger amount of detail got it for talant
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  12. Alias Breaker

    Alias Breaker New Member

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    whoa sick match up right here. i loved both pieces, but i feel talent came illest, he jus killed it with imagery, great vocab flow, interstin story. it was dope in every aspect

    stony had a sick verse too dont get me wrong, jus thought talen tpulled it out vote talent
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  13. Nebz

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    Tha Talent-Wins
    Stony-losses
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