5. Liquidlife 11-1 Vs 6. Unavailable 31-19

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Nebz, Sep 23, 2003.

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  1. Nebz

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  2. BaySick

    BaySick ill.

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    shits do today? but ya im droppin.
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    plz post ima be droppin later too night like 6ish maybe earlier..
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  5. Jersey_Emcee

    Jersey_Emcee aka LiQuiDliFe

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    im gonna post here shortly
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  6. LiQuiDliFe

    LiQuiDliFe RSTL Phenom

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    16. A love story gone tragic


    *A man and his love stand together in a heated conversation*



    Everyday I wake up I tend to praise you...such a beautiful sight
    Ever since I first saw you...I kinda knew it was right
    Your spewing with life...and I promise i'll keep us heathly
    You are my strenght on my journey to being wealthy
    Its like when I look in the mirror your there giving me power
    I love loving you...in the car, bed and in the shower
    Your always there when I need you...and I always believe you
    If your hungry for knowledge Im always here to feed you
    I'll never leave you...I swear its like your attachted to me
    When people see us together they smile ever so happily
    It baffles me how we're so close...its like you are me
    And you keep me strong when bad things come to harm me
    We are an army...and I wanna get married with you
    When I die...I know that im gonna get burried with you
    I want us to produce kids...so that we can have another



    *Love interupts the conversation*




    "But what ever happend to using rubbers??"
    "You use to protect me and keep me away from infection"
    "But ever since that day, you've filled me with injections"
    "I thought I was a blessing...but I guess you took me for granted"
    "Im gonna say how I feel...I dont care if you cant stand it"
    "I remember growing with you...I even made you stronger"
    "I gave you that extra boost when stressful days seemed longer"
    "I even let you tattoe your name on me...now thats love"
    "But now you fucking ruined me...and you tell me thats love??"
    "God said I was your temple and you should take care of me"
    "I feel like a 40 ounce beer now the way your sharing me"
    "Every day I show you signs of pain...but you never listened"
    "We were supposed to grow old together and seek better living"
    "You put me in harms way...I wish I was never attached to you"
    "But I cant leave and theres no point of speaking the past to you"
    "I can hear you thinking right now...just tell me why??"
    "If you do this now...me and you will both die"
    "I'll decay from being so empty...cause your like my soul"
    "Since you sinned so much you'll just fall down a black hole"
    "Ehh well....fuck it...no point now trying to solve our problems"
    "Im stuck to you like a disease...now that we somehow got em'
    "Do what you feel needs to be done...Im tired of being abused"
    "You felt my pain,but you didnt,bet it was all the drugs you used"
    "So go ahead and end us now...oh...scared to pull the trigger?"
    "Now you care about us now huh???....go figure"
    "Just get it over with now...because we'll just end up suffering"
    "And pay the price for all the drug use, casual sex and hustling"
    "Look at you...you fuckin' pu$$y....let me guess....your afraid??"
    "Make a choice now...a bullet to the head...or AIDS"
    "Im done talking...I quit...since or relationship was so oddly"
    "You lost everything man...even me....your own body"



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    20. You wakeup early at about 6:30am in the morning... and you rise and see yourself standing in the middle of your block... the scenery... deserted.... the air .. cold. The mood....... in deep thought...

    Why?

    Son...
    Livin in hate everyone’s great but I don’t give fuck for gods sake..
    Don’t bother me yall fake, and I got it all, u don’t got what it takes..
    Im the best person in this world I have everything I want, nothing..
    I keep to my self and I hope yall would too cuz I like it quiet or something..
    So quit fucking coming in my bus stop station its mine dammit..
    Find ur own, and leave me alone, I don’t want yall near me understand that.

    Thinkin back a couple Days: his dad says,
    Son ur worthless so is ur stupid mom, wastin my time and money..
    I tell ya its really getting to me, pretty soon im endin this, and it wont be funny..
    Cuz im not jokin no more ur mom is a whore, and ur just as fucked up..
    Me stayin with yall is beyond me but if I stay one day longer it’d be luck..
    So let this be a warning if you wake up tomorrow and im not here ull know..
    Its cuz ur mom pushed me to the last limit and I let that stupid bitch go ..

    Son..
    As I cry my self to sleep, fall into it real deep quick but long..
    The dream was fierce painless but strong my heart was gone..
    I had left my body and flew to the heavens where god told me..
    To not let this bother me, and go on with my life, strong but slowly..
    As I took what he said to the heart I didn’t have I tried to understand..
    But just couldn’t cope with what had happen to me so I released his hand..
    To the hells I fell and the devil welcomed me with open arms..
    As I feel into his fire red arms my eyes bled with pain I felt alarmed..
    Nothin I could do but except where I am at and cope with it..
    But I didn’t want to, so the devil sent me back to the earth filled with shit..


    Back to the bus station
    Ay!!!!!!!!
    I jump off the bench and fell to the ice-cold ground..
    As I look up and look for the regulars I don’t see or here a sound..
    Then I jump up and walk out looking into the streets, its empty..
    No one to see, no one to meet as I walk alone I feel weak, slowly ending..
    My body was just fallen apart, so then I run home to see my mother..
    As I arrive back to my home I left days earlier lifting the sheets nothing to uncover....
    Nobody there, the whole world was dead to me like I had asked..
    And I didn’t not like it one bit I guess my dream had come at last..
    Tho i can’t go back and change it, I just know i have a new life i wont trash..
    Cuz with this life ima make the best of it, since you only get so much time..
    And there isn’t enough to waste bitching and whining about ur parent’s crime..
    Just cuz they were fuck ups don’t let it fuck you up cuz it will ruin you..
    Just let it hurt you then move on and live ur life like you would normally do..


    Narrator:
    One thing the author forgot to add was the kid had this dream on the bus..
    And was moved to another bus station in Detroit and woke up there at 6:30 dust..
    And well nobody was around cuz it was so early so its seemed abandon..
    Then he didn’t go home he went into a vacant home so he felt stranded..
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  8. Og Simmson

    Og Simmson New Member

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    fuckin vote.
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  9. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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  10. 0u+k@$+

    0u+k@$+ J Budden=G.O.A.T & Im Gay

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    liquid...

    flow and lyrics wise,u were fairly strong throu the beginning and ending...tho some parts in the middle fell off and lacked ...closer was cool...no real surprises or climaxes..just kept a straight forward story line...overall...about an average verse...

    Unavailable...alot of parts were vague...flow was choppy for the most part...and the descriptive detail was lacking...i don kno...ur verse just didnt hold my attention as much as liquids...

    V/Liquidlife
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  11. LiQuiDliFe

    LiQuiDliFe RSTL Phenom

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  12. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    vote- Liquidlife

    I liked his structure, the two aspects intertwining with each other...his flow was nice and his vocab was tite too, but I particularly liked how he went into detail with his topic, exploiting it and how he flipped the script on the concept...very nice...Unavailabe had a nice verse, but I thought it was pretty simplistic and original, no creativity or twist...

    nice battle tho, g'luck
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  13. LiQuiDliFe

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  14. HighPawTheCyst

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    vote life

    he gave me a more descriptive, well balanced story, it kept me interested, it wasn't fire like im used to seeing from him but it was enough to pull off the win, on the oher hand, bay had an ok story, it was too simplistic, it was well written, but not as in depth as life's, props to both though
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  15. WiSDoM

    WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity

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    Liqiuid that verse was flames...so much emotion in it..especially that last verse, felt that a lot...kinda reminded me of the song "Kim" from emimem lol..just felt the emotion flowing thru the words...very dope verse..flow was on point..and content was really nice..well written and nicely structured..

    Unavailable:
    this story was pretty nice...if the whole story was on the level as that last verse u wrote..then it would of been better..flow was off at sumpoints..and it was kinda hard to follow..but i read thru it neways..good drop, but u could of cam ebetter i think..

    vote = liquid
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  16. LiQuiDliFe

    LiQuiDliFe RSTL Phenom

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  17. Og Simmson

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  18. Tha Talent

    Tha Talent , Tha Master.

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    look at it this way, you are probably(not sure about substradamous) the first with 20 losses
    and definitly the first with 30 wins and 20 losses
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  19. WiSDoM

    WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity

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    LMAO talent thas fucked kidd..but funny
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  20. Nebz

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    Liq wins
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