47. Adversary Vs 48. Smoke Trail

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Nebz, Sep 23, 2003.

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  1. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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  2. -Adversary-

    -Adversary- New Member

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    19. 1 step before death on the brinks of Suicide...

    I step before death on the brinks of suicide,
    Life built to be sacrificed to god between 2 knives.
    Hide shattered, Ready to go into battle,
    with my inner self and shadow, nerves rattled.
    Retrace thoughts locked of whats real and whats not,
    Ask why I got such depression which lead to aggression I fought.
    No answer responded back, so I started to run laps...
    With my brainwaves and acts, its wrapped, no turnin back.
    Held a gauge, inserted the recipe...death undressin me,
    Permanently settin free the anger, my flesh diseased.
    Has it really come to this? Standin 500ft. high...in front a fence,
    Demons claimin me, I give into the pressure...with one more script
    Its over wit fast, up to my head... I hold it and blast,
    But no explosion was cast...only the motion of gas.
    As soon as the smokin had passed, I was lookin through a mirror I cracked,
    Took the glass to my wrists, and with a swish...was nearin a gasp
    With fear I collapse...an hour later my parents find me, I was too blind to see the impact,
    But its too late...I'm a pile of blood and mush.......Interior black

    Holla
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  3. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    wad up checkin in, will drop tonight, -1-

    same topic i guess
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  4. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    if the Mod comes in here can i have an extension to tomorrow at 12am, i had some family things at the hospital i had to go to and couldnt get finishes, would appreicate a exten. if u can, thank you
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  5. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    EXTENSION GRANTED.
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  6. XplicitConcepts

    XplicitConcepts New Member

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    Bullshit man, you cant ask for an extension when you no-show, you shoulda asked way be4, i posted my verse up the first hour or so battles were up, youve taken like 4 days, and ive seen you browsing the boards up to half hour at a time, and you tell me you cant post? fuckin bullshit, it took me 20 min. to do my verse
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  7. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    man ive had alot of family shyt, so why u even mad, its just a board, im postin here in the next couple hrs, calm down, thank you for extention TekneeK
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  8. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    Here ya go.......Same topic


    As the darkness creeps in, i remember my many sins
    Now alone without any friends, there no way for me to win//
    so as i stare in the mirror all i see is death
    every minute it becomes clearer as i take breaths//
    i cant control my behavior, maybe these drugs arent saviors
    all im askin is one favor, afta i die speak my words with flavor//
    so after 2 bottles, a O, and some blow, im ready to flow
    off this balcony im to low, climb some stories to die as a pro//
    lookin over rememberin past times, and afta i die i cant rhyme
    so i think this really my time, maybe to myself death is lyin//
    can i commit this immortal crime, which choice should i take
    but ive committed so many mistakes, i break, take, & even raped//
    i dont deserve to live, i dont have anything else to give
    so im gunna push myself over this cliff after one more sniff//
    lay out 2 more gator lines, but this time the teeth get me
    so as darkest creeps in, am i diein, wakin up in the hospital in reality//​
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    did real quik off the head casue i gotta go back to the hospital, g/luck
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  9. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    sorry to hear about ST's situation, but in terms of battle, I think Adversary got this one, based on how he developed the topic more and also had a better flow and vocab...He could have gone more in-depth with the topic but didnt need to given the circumstances of this battle...

    vote= Adversary

    g'luck wit your family ST
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  10. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    thanks homie, i be back in effect in a week or so
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  11. NAX

    NAX Bring the Pain.

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    adversarys verse was dope for being so short. smoke might've made a good comeback if he would've had a more substantial piece, but it seemed rushed, and not full of the imagery and story in adversarys verse.

    i liked ad's alot, looking forward to reading more of your shit.

    vote = adversary.
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  12. WiSDoM

    WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity

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    at least u did enough to drop a verse and didn't pull no shady shit on a no show..ya know...so props for that, but it just wasnt enough to pull out the win yaknow?...adversary had the better verse all around..good drop by ya both..hope shit works out with ya family kidd..

    vote = adversary

    peace!
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  13. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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    i agree with the rest.. advasary came with the better short story this week... props to both for droppin stuff though an not no showing..

    good luck to whoever wins.

    vote advasary..

    pz
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  14. Gummo

    Gummo New Member

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    have to go with the flow, adv took this with the better short story.. both verse were pretty good i look forward to reading more involving bthe both of you in the later rounds.. maybe somethin a little longer? hah

    pz

    vote: adv
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  15. Papa_Smurf

    Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi

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    I wasn't really feeling either verse that much in this case. Both could have done a bit better in my opinion. but Advas had the btter verse in this case.

    Vote: Advas
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  16. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    Adversary wins
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    Tha Talent , Tha Master.

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