46. Cocaine Charlie 0-0 vs. 47. Kaszmo 0-0

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  1. Omen

    Omen O Luh Da Kids

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  2. kaszmo

    kaszmo New Member

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    iight Im here
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  3. Cocaine Charlie

    Cocaine Charlie shock aka solution

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    checkin in

    i dont use the comp much, so i forgot i signed up for this, so i had to rush sumthin..

    goodluck
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  4. Cocaine Charlie

    Cocaine Charlie shock aka solution

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    Abuse

    Dear…my true love

    I cant explain the abuse you’ve endured..
    Took pain and been used as a whore..
    Maintained, never let loose out the door..
    And still refrained from givin proof to the law..
    Described as Insane, ruthless , and more..
    I never took the blame, but truth is the cure..
    Like a train that moves in my thoughts, regrettable..
    Injuries sustained, but never dragged me thru the courts, incredible..

    Less talking about my actions..
    I never thought u’d be on crack, son..
    I wish I could take it back, ofcourse a retraction..
    You were jus the one I unleashed my morbin attacks on..
    I see ive drove you to drugs, crack, right?
    Never thought you’d be the thug you act like..
    Changed person due to bad blood, infact spite..
    My abuse to you, endured on those lovely black nights..
    Remember when I told you to bend over to pull that trapped kite?
    It wasn’t rape man, jus misunderstood scraps, fights..

    But hey yo..i’d prefer it if we stop dwellin on the past..
    Id like to forget those dark nights where I gave you swellin to the ass..
    If eva I wanted a blowjob, I’d jus tell you not jus ask..
    Im a pimp, your ugly, but im sure I could sell you with a mask..
    Yo mom was a decent fuck, she jus didn’t satisfy me enugh..
    So I decided to turn to you, when I realized she was ruff..
    she had potential too, but I jus wasn’t feelin the size of her cups..
    I ignored yo momma normally, coz the only prize was a fuck…
    Tappin that ass, then comin to ya room n’ tie’n you up..
    Telling you “there’s no point in tryin to be tough”..

    So c’mon now, lets jus consider the damn future..
    Like me stickin my dick up all the way to ya liver, does that suit ya?
    Nah, im locked up, no near future meetins with this explicit gay..
    Thas unless ya wanna wank me off on visit day..
    Ya see young’n, I had other tender lil males..
    You were jus the stupid one who never tried to send me to jail..
    Unlike one other , who appeared and under the oath he swore..
    That I was treatin him n his momma both like whores..
    Iight but yo, times low so ima finish this letter quick..
    Coz im Writin this from by jail cell, while experiencing better dick..

    Im telling you this coz you deserve the truth and nothin but that..
    Yo momma? Here’s jus proof I wasn’t jus fuckin that ass..
    Ya see telling you I was her sex buddy was jus obvious, rather..
    Than lettin ya no ya abuser was ya biological father..
    So thinkk about those nights I raped your dick n’ you’d cum yo..
    It was actually ya own daddy who was lickin ya bum hole..
    Iight I gtg, mah boys here for his daily romp, so listen..
    ima keep in contact, (Us celebs even get comps in prison)
    but man, never forget how i made ur hole undone..
    i love you dearly, kaszmo my son..

    Yours Sincerely R.Kelly


    R Kelly
    Aged 46
    Servin His 2nd Sentence
    13 Years
    Child Rape (4 counts)
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  5. kaszmo

    kaszmo New Member

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    TOPIC: Pictures On The Wall

    I see colors, formin reason..
    A bond between em, makes me see a new meanings..
    A thinkin so twisted, this pictures relate to wishes..
    I feel a distance so close, like never before..
    This colors on the wall, have me tremble and fall..

    A face, an eye, a tear it crys..
    I visualize the wisdome in the lines..
    Drawn in times ago, times with sunshine and hope..
    I try to cope, and show no emotions but my minds been blown..
    These colors combine the shine of the best time of all..
    Beauty I cant discribe in words, so perfect, damn my eyes and mind, they hurt..
    Jus from one look, one peek, these paintins so antique..
    But still so near n deep, they tear on me till its hard to breath..
    I feel my heart it beats, quick, skips n the flat line starts to peep..
    My eyes shot close, my mind at ease, finally, I let all the air out..
    Hear distant calls but I know Im there now, Im home, one with the wall..
    One with the colors, I ignore the desprate calls that I hear from the outside..
    Cus they don’t know how right, this feels, as I smile I feel tears of joy on my cheeks..
    I look up to the sky, n close my eyes, cus this is all I need..
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  6. Resilient.

    Resilient. .. . ..

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    .. ^ Over No Shows

    -Weez
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  7. Entrensical

    Entrensical still EXS and STC

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    vote-cocaine charlie


    better overall verse

    i liked his story better

    kaszmo came nice.. just a lil too short

    but a nice verse, nonetheless
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  8. kaszmo

    kaszmo New Member

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  9. Cocaine Charlie

    Cocaine Charlie shock aka solution

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  10. iceheart

    iceheart The Frozen Poet

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    vote: cocaine charlie
    i liked his story better because it had flow and he showed that he could wield his vocabulary, and his plot was pretty good.

    peace
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  11. DahLohner

    DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy

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    hmm..

    Cocaine Charlie- Nice verse, had a decent rhyme scheme, technically sound but..why was Rkelly raping boys? was he raping the kid of the..girl he raped?
    That's alot of rapage lol It was more of a diss in story form..

    Kaszmo- Poetic, loved the flow to this, very creative, you should have dropped more lol but you covered the topic nicely.

    Vote-Kaszmo

    IMOUT
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  12. AuThoR NYSE

    AuThoR NYSE Black Hand

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    Kas came with a real poetic feel to his verse... it was nicely written and he covered the topic well.. I enjoyed the outlook taken on this one.. I wish that you would of dropped more.. it felt at times as if your verses skipped something... Charlie came with a good verse... it seemed a little humorous at times.. and I enjoyed the lil twist on the end.. although I feel the whole R-Kelly thing is a little cliched by now this was still a good read... But I think Charlie came with a more complete thought process... Kas came nice.. but like I said I felt that his verse skipped a little bit... and could of offered more... But charlie left me fulfilled at the end.. Kas you had me wanting more...

    Vote - Charlie
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  13. Blazin'

    Blazin' SaviorLife

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    this battle was nice

    i like the twist on cocaine's verse..he stayed consistant throughout the whole verse..kas started strong..with great imagery, but it seem'd as if he repeated himself throughout the verse, it caught my eye at first then died off

    vote- charlie
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  14. Cigma

    Cigma Maxwell's Demon

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    Vote - Coke

    Coke - Your verse wasn't bad. Rhyme scheme was alright, but it started to loose it down the piece. Description was good. At first I thought you were gonna describe abuse from it's different forms...but then you went into that whole dad rape thing of his son...which I wasn't really feeling, but then you flipped it and were actually talking about your opponent heh....seems a lot of people were doing that this weak....I'm not really for it one way or another...but I think the flip needs to be better if you're gonna do something like that, because then it just seems tacked on if you feel me. Wordplay imagery was there, story was told clearly, although it wasn't that amusing to me you did a good job.

    Kazmo - Thanks for the cock tease man. Beginning started good and I was liking how it was written. You just fell utterly short. You scrateched the surface, I wanted to see what the picture was to the character. Why he felt so much strong emotion toward it, and why it was significant. I think there was only one line that said what the picture was, and that was vague. This needed to be finished, but what was there was nice.
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  15. Vern Acular

    Vern Acular 12x RSTL Champ

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    im going for coke on this one, both was aight, but i loved cocaines imagery
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  16. Omen

    Omen O Luh Da Kids

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    Charlie Wins 1-0

    Kas Loss 0-1
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