41. KIT 1-1 vs. 42. Mysterious 1-1

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  1. Mr.Perfect

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  2. HIGHRISE

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    topic: you stumble on to a time machine... you go back in time to see your entire life so far.... if you change somethingwhat would you change to improve you life now......and how would your lie be improved from it?


    workin at the junk yard....
    makes one feel like a retard....
    everyday be the same but i can only find myself to blame...
    until one day this old man came...
    dragin this big piece of metal that resembled a mirrorless frame...
    after he left i took it towards the back of the yard...
    on the way back i tripped ova a piece of wood that was chared...
    i fell through the center...
    flashing back i can see the hospital and i see my parents enter....
    suddenly i flash forward to a fight between my parents over a sunday dinner...
    i appear at age 3 and visually i see them...
    my mom walked out her name is kim...
    my dad fucked up but i dont blame him...
    jolting forward i find myself at disneyworld with my grandparents ...
    that would be the last time i would see my grandfather i have cryed myself to sleep ever since...
    at his funeral my family was so tence...
    flashing forward a lil more findin my self in my girls room...
    back in the corner i loom i see my virginity loss ....
    that girl sealed my certain doom..
    then boom to my senior year in high school....
    i had everyone laughin being the class fool...
    thats when i thought they were under my rule...
    speeding ahead to graduation day...
    not shocking to hear my name not read...
    the town i grew up in, is the place i fled...
    off to a new town is where no one knew i was a sped....
    no having my diploma left my life closed in like a coma...
    flashing back to resent day now i drivea 1990 beat up tocoma...
    living in a small town in oklahoma...
    where the air smells like shit but you get used to the eroma..
    lookng back now dispite all that went wrong...
    i wuldent chage anything because it made me emotionally strong...
    life is ight in this trailor park......
    life is pretty good being a undercover nark....


    (this story is backround story for the agent)

    first time i have done a rstl verse since last year kinda rusty
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  3. K.I.T.

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    check-in.
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  4. K.I.T.

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    TIME MACHINE

    I'm a loser, same thing everyweek//
    Work, text, than maybe go out an emcee//
    Ball kinda too, suck tho, uh-oh, I know believe me//
    Heard it all before, what life has in store. bitter realities//
    Occasionally I jerk-off. only cuz I ain't got hoes//
    Been like that for a minute, fuck life. Jesus take me, I wanna go//
    I seen my high school buds the other day//
    They graduated, while I dropped out. Now I see why my life's this way//
    Rollin in a hooptie, tryin to get bitches. but they say no//
    Soo poor I ride 8" wheels. but I keep them clean tho//
    When it breaks down I walk. my house not that far//
    So one day guess what I found par?//
    A Time machine. I found it close to home//
    says it promises past. Left moms a letter, "I'm gone"//
    Now I'm off on my course, forget remourse//
    Cuz if life was a bitch. then I'd want a divorce//
    I don't know how to control it. but I know how to drive//
    So anything that goes is all the same. right???//
    guess so. hit the ignition, and all I seen was a flash//
    Next thing you know I'm waking up on the ground next to trash//
    Felt myself for my limbs. "are they still here?" check//
    Got out the Time Machine. I got things to correct//
    Lookin' around, and I can tell it's 92//
    Cuz it's the "LA Riot's" and I see my old crue//
    On Manhattan Place. where active lootin is taking place//
    Next thing you know I see the same face//
    "Midnight" the 92 version. with a jerry-curl flat-top//
    A "Malcom X" tee-shirt. and the new "Pumps" by Reebok//
    I immediately hide. to keep anonymous//
    Got a disguise. thought "now I'm more fit for this"//
    So I pulled my younger version aside. we had a talk//
    Jabbed back in forth. as I took him on a walk//
    Spoke with him. told him to "hold on, bitches will come"//
    "You keep fuckin' you'll have a son, and life's all about the long-run"//
    "The rich and poor", "College grads and the ones that did'nt"//
    "The government is set up to honor those, and put the rest in prison"//
    "Like good riddance...So droppin out is like suicide"//
    "It may not seem like it now, but I am your future, and I wanna die"//
    He took it serious. told me thanks, and he'll stay in school//
    After that I left and told my younger version to play it cool//

    1~
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  5. Mr.Perfect

    Mr.Perfect New Member

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    upp over no shows
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  6. prophetional

    prophetional hokey muh-fuckin' pokey

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    vote = mysterious.

    his story itself was told better: and every other aspect of his verse was also slightly better. (ie; flow, construction, creativity, etc...)
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  7. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    vote = mysterious

    both off at times but i just like the story better.....
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  8. HIGHRISE

    HIGHRISE New Member

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  9. HellRzah

    HellRzah PurE EviL

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    aiight
    I gotta go with Mysterious on this one..he came more consistant flow-wise and told an overal better story and put a lil more creativity in it..nice battle


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  10. HIGHRISE

    HIGHRISE New Member

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    3-0 me up
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  11. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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    hmmmmm....

    i liked KIT's structure better and he had better references in his verse to what he was taking about, but the flow and structure and everything was off... but, he had the right idea... focus on your structure...

    Mysterious, i wasnt feeling the story as much, i didnt quite get it all, about the undercover narc. it seemed like an ending just thrown out there to me, but u had better structure and the story flowed better and u took it on better vocab and such...

    Vote Mysterious...
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  12. HIGHRISE

    HIGHRISE New Member

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    4-0 me... up ......
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  13. Ruthless Mic

    Ruthless Mic New Member

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    wack concept for both of yall to pick, it's severely played. but msterious had the upper hand.

    Vote = Mysterious
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  14. Atheist

    Atheist Storyteller

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    Hate to follow the crowd but,

    Vote: Mysterious.


    Better overall story told. KIT seemed iffy, parts
    just seemed to be missing. I don't know if this
    is true, but it seemed rushed. Is that true? If
    so, it explains why your verse is the way it is.
    Anyway, Myst just had the better content etc.
    Simple as that.
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  15. DahLohner

    DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy

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    OMG..

    Mysterious- Not to dog you, but your flow was ugly. Work on that, and cohesiveness.. I understand how you flashed back and forth in time, but I just wasnt feeling the piece, or the explanation.

    KIT- A bad verse as well, but not because you didn't try. Good flow tho, and I was feeling the ending, how you met up with yourself and reflected, plus some details from the past.

    Vote-KIT

    IMOUT
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  16. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    Mys wins.
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