41.Exit Eight Vs 42. N.L.

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Nebz, Oct 5, 2003.

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  1. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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  2. Exit Eight

    Exit Eight Turn Here

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    in, dont no show
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  3. ill-tone

    ill-tone .off the sound waves.

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    in....lets get it poppin.
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  4. ill-tone

    ill-tone .off the sound waves.

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    oops...I hit post quick reply on mistake.
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  5. Exit Eight

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    9.you have just jumped off a skyscraper and you are plummeting towards the ground... what's going through your head?-Kon Ok... Exit Eight

    Elevator taking me higher up the steps to the top of the building
    I reach the roof and stand in a still wind, my stomach feels thin
    I jump off, my spine curves in the sky, I am a man willing to die
    I dont get a sensation that I can fly, all I feel is polluted air in my eyes
    Dont care enough to despise, the reason that my anatomy flies
    Just the fact that ... I'm sick of these type catastrophe lies
    Coming from my loved ones on top of that? It only calls for my demise
    Coming close to the ground, as my final destanation has been found
    After some time of searching, I've decided it's in the air, drifting down
    But the falling grows slow, the ground opens up and I'm thrown
    Into a pit of Hell, I can feel the increase in which my fears grown
    Falling through Earth, vortex, whirlwind, tornado, type of natural disastor
    I open my eyes in the depths of Hell, and the view is practical there after
    I stand up, see a red beast scream at me yelling "Praise me!"
    Sends a blow to my face as my vision becomes obscured and hazy
    Walking dazy, I see faces of the evilest men of Earh, their stares cage me
    Talking crazy, feeling as if I've walked for miles, the pain drains me
    I see the red beast approach me again, he utters "Sorry, I'm outspoken, my friend"
    "Welcome to my palace, you may refer to it as your next of kins home"
    I know this foe had a plot to trick my dome, "Come sit with me at the kings throne"
    He said it with kind words, I couldn't resist
    Though I knew what was happening I felt that I was in bliss
    Kiss, of the Devil, this, game is his he leveled it
    I know not what he's doing with me, or why he acts benevolent
    We sit down to a table where I see a type of pungent evil
    Hitler, Grim Reaper, Pope Alexander, and black nights of the medievil
    I feel ill, circled by those I was taught to loathe and revere
    Now sitting at a table with them? Hitler 4 inches near?
    I shed a tear, my brain is filled with fear, though my phsyche tells me I'm dead
    All their voices start to scream at once and I'm losing my head
    Movig my legs, away from my seat all of them chasing at me
    I see a light, I know its the right, way to go, but my legs are blown
    I force myself to move, but my failure is known
    The demons catch me, latch me, onto a hook at the top of a dune
    I scan Hell itself, and see man Demon Platunes
    People in burning, covered with maggots, flies, roaches and bugs
    Others in chairs, doctors injecting needles, having them overdosing with drugs
    Mean mugs, beating up on the seniors and children condemned
    And to think it all stems, he told me, from the thought what he enforced back then
    And it hit me like ten, pounds of bricks, I learned of my quest
    This was all a test, to show that I must not fear those who contest me
    Those that can test me, there won't be any left see
    Then, Lucifer sent my knowledge and tried to stop it
    I grabbed his pitchfork, raised it over his head and put it into the top of it
    The light opened, I strolled in, floated to the top then ..
    This is when I awoke .. alive scratching at the inside of my buried coffin

    Gluck
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  6. ill-tone

    ill-tone .off the sound waves.

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    The room was dark, like a blind mans vision
    2 kids stood face-to-face both picture winnin,
    Only ones comin out alive - designin rhyme
    crushed egos through metaphors n punchlines,
    In split seconds the battle shifted, new beat
    A hunger stricken MC attacks like the dudes meat
    Tucked in my shell case-I hoped they'd choose me-
    Bruisin em' truly as soon as he starts shooting,
    Beats switched rapidly, the room watched fanaticly
    Shadowing the mastery of the two kids battling
    Whos the illest? their words clashed and bashed-
    Fast as light mass, One fearing that he might crash
    He stepped back, and he judged the other spitter
    Affraid of bein quitter-he found somethin to deliver
    It wasn't a bar, he was fed up with cursed words
    Diverse worlds split the blood bubbled in his nerves
    As the kid kept dissing, he kept getting pissed
    Fuck fighting - it wasn't worth sending out his fist
    The battle was done, he was caught slippin under
    He tried to jump back on beat he just studdered
    The room laughed, the emcee handed him his ass
    Now considered trash cause his skill burnt to ash
    N.L. picked up the mic and said "round two"
    The winner refused n said "the loser circle found you-"
    "NEXT!" this guy's playin you for a chump
    My thoughts sifted in N.L.s head, I told him to jump
    "Pull me out man, the whole problem'll be solved-
    If not ya ego dissolves-come on man grow some balls"
    N.L. reached in his pants, feeling for the gun
    two shots to the ceiling, the crowd screaming "RUN!"
    N.L. whispered "You wont escape when I pop"
    I waited in my chamber silently fiendin to be shot
    *BOOM* I came screaming out the glock
    I flash of light shined, and then Exit Eight dropped
    I ripped through his ecko shirt-pierced skin
    4 cm wide and bring pain to the most fierce men
    Lodging in his chest, i'm heating up his flesh
    I feel free now, i'm not stuck in a chamber or a vest
    All around me is moans, groans and pools of blood
    That'll teach any rapper to ever fool with us
    I couldnt see shit, I was too deep in him for sight
    All I heard was another shot,
    my brother shifted N.L.s mind right.
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  7. ill-tone

    ill-tone .off the sound waves.

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    1.You are a stray bullet used in a murder, tell your story-Camber

    Damn I read this wrong...
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  8. SIN2

    SIN2 as we speak

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    DAMN...Exit...

    vote=Exit

    He just held it down...i mena his flow was off tha chain....vivid images....just all around niceness..

    NL u came nice also.....but u ended it to early...not enuff pizazz...
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  9. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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    both came nice.. I think exit put a little more effort into his verse. comparing them both I could see he used more detail to help the imagination of the story. the bars where kind of long at times but good drop.

    NL I enjoyed your verse.. flow was nice I was feelin tha short bar style you brought and u kept the story moving along. im not sure it was as polished as your opponents though.

    vote exit eight

    best of luck to u both
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  10. NAX

    NAX Bring the Pain.

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    nL had the better flow. too bad he mixed two topics together. it still came out pretty nice. feeling the emcee vibe, then the bullet references thrown in. but it didn't make enough sense for me to enjoy it.


    exit 8's flow and rhyme scheme was a little scatter-brained, all over the place, but his message was clear and concise, and more importantly had a clear idea on the topic, presented it nicely, and followed it up with a pretty interesting twist at the end.

    too bad you couldn't do too much w/ that topic, i have a feeling a lot of people picked it because its the easiest one to do. but i think exit eight got this one.

    pce.
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  11. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    Over No Shows
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  12. Spy2

    Spy2 BlahBlahBlah -MostRappers

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    I really liked exit's verse... a couple places were nonsense for the sake of rhyming, but not too many. I really liked the lines:
    Coming close to the ground, as my final destanation has been found
    After some time of searching, I've decided it's in the air, drifting down

    In some places it kinda rambled, but overall it was real nice.


    NL's was a little confusing, due to well, confusion... about the topics... I understood it, but the shift in the middle threw me off for a little there... pretty good flow, but as someone said earlier, just didn't seem as well thought out... good matchup here, too bad about the topic confusion.

    VOTE: Exit Eight
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  13. HighPawTheCyst

    HighPawTheCyst New Member

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    vote - exit

    both verses were ok, but i enjoyed exit's more vivid feel he put with his, n.L. had a nice flow, but the mixture of topics threw me a little, they didn't connect well with me, props to both though
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  14. SamGoodY

    SamGoodY trully inspired...

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    vote=NL

    8's verse was nice, not much lacking, but the flow wasn't always smooth in my reading... some transitions seemed forced. both verses i thought were pretty equal actually. NL's was smoother, 8's was deeper... so i had to vote on which one i enjoyed reading more... hence, my decision.
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  15. Nu-SeNsE

    Nu-SeNsE WHERE THE $$$'S COME FROM

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    vote exit.....i voted him because n.l even though ur verse was good i found it hard to follow..... exit nice verse gr8 flow...
    both had tight shit but my vote has to swing towards the EXIT...
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  16. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    vote= Exit Eight...

    I thought he developed his topic better, and his imagery, vocab and detail were tite...although the topic has been played like a bitch, he did a nice job of addin detail and imagery to the topic...

    N.L= I thought you could have done a lot more with this topic, added more detail and imagery...it was a nice verse, just not as good as Exit Eight's...
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  17. prophetional

    prophetional hokey muh-fuckin' pokey

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    doesn't look like my vote matters? but anyways, vote goes to exit...
    vivid imagery, descriptive.... not to take anything away, but N.L.'s verse just reminded me of "8mile" with a new ending... (actually the whole topic did... lacked originality) hard to flip a topic like that. the talent showed, but the topic choice killed ya here i think?
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  18. WiSDoM

    WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity

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    yeah this battle seems pretty much one sided here lol..exit had the better verse...had the better flow...put more effort into his verse..i can just tell by reading it..seemed like he wanted this more..

    nl some parts of ur story seemed rushed..and seemed a little simplistic...could of came alot better...but it was a decent verse...just not enough to beat exit this time..

    vote = exit
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  19. Maddest of Men

    Maddest of Men Just Call Me Madman

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    I'm just gonna say props to Exit, you came in (with your own topic :p) and you owned it... I mean, great flip at the end, a great story, great symbolism.... What else is their to say... Oh yeah

    Vote= Exit Eight
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  20. Tha Talent

    Tha Talent , Tha Master.

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    nice to see 2 newcomers with some talent
    both of you need polishing
    but exit eight took it with a more vivid verse
    more well written
    and i actually feel like he had better flow
    just work on your plot construction
    this was a bad topic the first time it was used
    just not enough room for creativity

    N.L. had a decent verse.
    i'm not liking the way you laid down the ending
    wording is so essential in pieces like this
    you didn't have it working for you
    that, and you called your main character NL
    think of a better name, no offense
    something more typical that works better with rhyme scheme
    naming your character can be quite important
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