41. Criteria (1-1) vs. 42. Montana Grimey (1-0)

Discussion in 'Rapmusic.com Battle League' started by FórmÅl LôGíc, Dec 13, 2004.

Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.
  1. FórmÅl LôGíc

    FórmÅl LôGíc Black Listed

    Joined:
    Apr 3, 2001
    Messages:
    22,962
    Failure To Recognize Or Abide By ANY Of These Rules Will Result In The Given Penalty That Regulates The Rules. And Continuous Bitching, Whining, And Excessive Complaining Will Result In Your Termination From the Tourney or possibly RBL Until A Mod See's Fit For You To Return.
    No Questions Asked Policy. You Break A Rule. You Pay The Price Period. NO EXCEPTIONS. Dont Care If Your Janitor/Jeff.
    Now On To The Complete Rules And Regulations.

    -BATTLES ARE DUE FRIDAY, MIDNIGHT WESTERN!
    -VOTES ARE DUE SUNDAY, 10pm EASTERN

    -You MUST vote on 6 battles for the first 2 weeks & EDIT the vote links
    in your "check in" posts. Failure to vote on ALL 6 will result in a
    deduction of votes for the links you're missing. Meaning.. you
    drop 4 links, you LOSE 2 votes automatically.

    -Mininum Lines: 4 (2 Couplets)/ Max. Lines: 30 (15 Couplets)!
    Also, battlers MUST agree on the amount of lines to be written
    for each verse. If not, whoever drops first determines the MAX
    line amount. For example, If I drop 16 first, without agreeing
    my opponent cannot go MORE than 16 lines. If YOU DO go over the maximum line limit set. YOU LOSE -1 Vote For Each Couplet Over


    -NO EDITING your verse AFTER BOTH verses have been posted. EDITING your post after both rhymes have been posted will result in an immediate DQ. Dont matter if your editing spelling or a fucking PERIOD. Its a DQ. No Questions Asked.


    -NO 1 Sentence Voting


    MOD AIM CONTACTS:
    -Formal Logic - Mrwriteswell
    -Macabre - gods encore
    -USER - ROFLZ MY WOFLZ
    -Super. - oxnardquickie
    test
  2. montana Grimey

    montana Grimey tony montana's crackbaby.

    Joined:
    Nov 30, 2004
    Messages:
    1,746
    checkin in..

    12 sounds good?
    test
  3. montana Grimey

    montana Grimey tony montana's crackbaby.

    Joined:
    Nov 30, 2004
    Messages:
    1,746
    Oye pana...
    Ya rep?.. silenced, cuz ur life hanging on a string, and not those connect to violens
    get left with Nicks and bruises like Jessica Simpson engaged in Dosmetic Violence
    Al Murder U so I laugh-out-loud for the mod will let this bizzerk, stay in
    dey should've left you rolling by ya lonesome like tumble weeds in dessert, my friend
    insert ya ego crown wit thorns like jesus, diminishing so much azn Jin will frown
    believe dis, i won dis round..cuz,
    azn scared of me now, so i'll skydive with his phobias, to have his fears bring him down
    fucking with chico now, time to face ya fears, so wipe the sobs and erase the tears
    beat me?...that could'nt even fly with Mace's ears
    this joke don't have it, fucked wif me so look death in the eye like open casket
    you must b high on dust how i'll have you hit the fans like half of the Pacers, faggot
    formal logic shud put you in a P-wee leaque, cuz P-wee is bait, round RBL ull get rape
    imma have to do the dirty work and take P- off my chest like hitting re-wind on R.Kelly's
    sex tape....
    test
  4. Criteria

    Criteria Superman in this bitch!

    Joined:
    Oct 8, 2004
    Messages:
    551
    OMFG @ your stretched garbage..


    come on kid, step and face the worst..
    id give you a personal, but you need a reputation first
    rape this herb, you fake, so quit frontin..
    cuz ya lines a sign that u tryna compensate for sumthen
    i aint playin, on this site u aint ready..
    ya punches dont hit, they miss & miss like dyke weddings
    im azn, & yes some stereotypes are true..
    but in this show, your the yellow, small-dicked cartoon
    one look @ my verse, and youll die-late..
    i mean shit!! you fucking rep montana for chrissakes!!
    midway in this shit, im already done threw..
    cuz i just half assed a verse and going to prove that even a strectched bullshit closer is all i need to son you
    test
  5. MENACE

    MENACE Jimmy Friday Tha Menace

    Joined:
    Jan 18, 2000
    Messages:
    2,828
    the vote

    MONTANA GRIMEY---

    Your bars did kinda drag but i sped up my flow when i was reading it and caught onto the rhythm i think u had when you were writing it.... anywayz upon that note....

    Oye pana...
    Ya rep?.. silenced, cuz ur life hanging on a string, and not those connect to violens
    get left with Nicks and bruises like Jessica Simpson engaged in Dosmetic Violence

    Nice Opener


    believe dis, i won dis round..cuz,
    azn scared of me now, so i'll skydive with his phobias, to have his fears bring him down

    That was aiight but it kinda missed tha punch in my opinion

    fucking with chico now, time to face ya fears, so wipe the sobs and erase the tears
    beat me?...that could'nt even fly with Mace's ears
    this joke don't have it, fucked wif me so look death in the eye like open casket

    LMAO at tha mace thing--- tha open casket part was hottness too

    you must b high on dust how i'll have you hit the fans like half of the Pacers, faggot
    formal logic shud put you in a P-wee leaque, cuz P-wee is bait, round RBL ull get rape
    imma have to do the dirty work and take P- off my chest like hitting re-wind on R.Kelly's
    sex tape....

    Tha ending was aiight, slightly funny, i think u coulda touched it up without stretching it out (again with tha rhythm thing) but still feeling it....

    CRITERIA-----

    You kept it short and sweet,

    come on kid, step and face the worst..
    id give you a personal, but you need a reputation first

    Lol- that was an aiight opener

    rape this herb, you fake, so quit frontin..
    cuz ya lines a sign that u tryna compensate for sumthen

    pretty nice

    i aint playin, on this site u aint ready..
    ya punches dont hit, they miss & miss like dyke weddings

    LmAo at that,

    one look @ my verse, and youll die-late..
    i mean shit!! you fucking rep montana for chrissakes!!

    ha-ha

    I didnt like your ending cuz u kinda contradicted yourself sayin you didnt have to stretch out tha verse to win, but you stretched out tha bar...


    In conclusion, i felt this battle and there were some nice lines back in forth and a few punches. I feel Criteria came with tha punches harder and they were also harder hittin than montanas. Although i complained about tha flow, i liked montanas more--- i understand that criteria wanted a simple flow to prove he could win yada yada yada, its all good---

    It was a hard choice but because of criteria's punches i had to vote in his favor,
    stay up
    OnE

    Vote- Criteria
    test
  6. montana Grimey

    montana Grimey tony montana's crackbaby.

    Joined:
    Nov 30, 2004
    Messages:
    1,746
    Thanks alot for the Vote Menace.. that a mUtHaPhUcKIN VoTE!...

    Yea I was trying sumthing out in this battle, didnt come out as good as it shud.. Fuuckit Maybe next time.
    test
  7. Kon Quest

    Kon Quest New Member

    Joined:
    Nov 22, 2004
    Messages:
    363
    Montana - you seemed a bit off in this one. Your punches weren't really hitting and your lines were really stretched. I mean, take this for example....

    insert ya ego crown wit thorns like jesus, diminishing so much azn Jin will frown
    believe dis, i won dis round..cuz,
    azn scared of me now, so i'll skydive with his phobias, to have his fears bring him down

    ^^^ That was one couplet!!!! Anyway, shorten up those lines, it took me twice as long to read your verse as it did Menace.....


    Menace - You seemed to come weak, but you still crushed him. Your lines were short and to the point except for the closer, which was pretty funny in my opinion. Anyway, this was an easy win for you.....

    Vote - Menace
    test
  8. Kon Quest

    Kon Quest New Member

    Joined:
    Nov 22, 2004
    Messages:
    363
    Whoops.....got the name wrong......It's supposed to be Criteria.

    Sorry.....
    test
  9. KnowSkills

    KnowSkills Prolix The Shit Talker

    Joined:
    Dec 2, 2004
    Messages:
    209
    this was one big run on jumbled,forced piece of shit with punchlines that grazed criteria but never made any clean hits. sadly there was only one line i like. sorry fucking adored. which was the r.kelly line. best one ever. kudos on that. otherwise it was a losing verse. even if criteria no showed.

    shit was straight and to the point. the dyke weddings line had me in stitches. i feel like you could have exploited the "die-late" line alot more. sadly you also only had one line i liked but your scheme was alot neater and precise and made alot more sense than that english teachers nightmare before you.

    My Vote: Criteria
    test
  10. Blessense

    Blessense a Kilo is 1,000 grams..

    Joined:
    Oct 17, 2003
    Messages:
    17,129
    look death in the eye like open casket

    vs

    come on kid, step and face the worst..
    id give you a personal, but you need a reputation first
    rape this herb, you fake, so quit frontin..
    cuz ya lines a sign that u tryna compensate for sumthen
    i aint playin, on this site u aint ready..
    ya punches dont hit, they miss & miss like dyke weddings


    ive seen that compensate for something line somewhere before
    still, better structure, less forced & more readable..

    other dude had 1 or 2 iight concepts but his format let him down..

    vote- Criteria
    test
  11. montana Grimey

    montana Grimey tony montana's crackbaby.

    Joined:
    Nov 30, 2004
    Messages:
    1,746
    FUCK YA!!!!!

    naw just playing yea he won this..
    thanks for the votes tho
    they wernt one-liners..
    But hopefully
    I can to battle one of yall
    so I can rip YA!
    test
  12. Ninja Kid

    Ninja Kid AKA Jae Keeps

    Joined:
    Oct 11, 2004
    Messages:
    2,034
    gotta vote for criteria, even tho its obvious, but hey, i gotta make the votes i get count...
    vote - criteria
    test
  13. DirtBoy69

    DirtBoy69 why is this wrong?

    Joined:
    Dec 5, 2001
    Messages:
    1,619
    criteria gets my vote, flow punches and all that way above it's all been explained already look above
    test
  14. Terse

    Terse Title Unavailable

    Joined:
    Dec 2, 2004
    Messages:
    14
    OMFG @ your stretched garbage..


    come on kid, step and face the worst..
    id give you a personal, but you need a reputation first

    ^These three lines alone won it for Criteria....lmao....Montana had some good attempts at punches in his verse, but the flow was way too fucked up cuz of the stretched lines....

    anyways, Vote - Criteria
    test
  15. ...Famous...

    ...Famous... What your Screamin'

    Joined:
    Nov 2, 2004
    Messages:
    29
    Montana - You had an aiight verse I expeced more from you, you punches were ok, but didnt hit hard as they shouldve did

    Criteria - You had some nice lines some could be used as personals some coldnt be you came pretty nice

    Vote - Criteria
    test
  16. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

    Joined:
    Feb 1, 2004
    Messages:
    3,357
    Montana -- You gotta work on your structure cuz no ones really feeling it, kinda stretched a bit..punches were blehhh, you'll get better.

    Criteria -- Some pretty nice stuff, that reputation & personal line was niiice you took this with better punches, flow, and all of the above..

    ------------

    No hate on either party but criteria took this wiht harder hittin punches along with being more consistant ya know? no hate at montana..keep uppin and you'll get better man.

    Vote -- Criteria
    test
  17. montana Grimey

    montana Grimey tony montana's crackbaby.

    Joined:
    Nov 30, 2004
    Messages:
    1,746
    MC ReFlexx... Im not gonna hate man.. lol
    Thats for everyones feeds tho

    Next time I'll have shorter punches lol
    I was just trying sumthing out,
    that aint my style...



    Nice verse Crit...
    test
  18. Super.

    Super. New Member

    Joined:
    Sep 26, 2003
    Messages:
    25,562
    test
  19. Nell

    Nell New Member

    Joined:
    Dec 17, 2004
    Messages:
    42
    Vote - Criteria...

    Verse was sub-par. had some decent attempts at forming some wordplay. Montana, your shit is mad stretched man, and it is hard for the readers to follow your verse. you know what im sayin? anyways, criteria won with a sub-par verse. straight battle. PeeSe.
    test
  20. -Heinous-

    -Heinous- Playing The Game Of Life

    Joined:
    Nov 23, 2004
    Messages:
    278
    Montana Grimey - Some nice punches in this shit, but the flow was terrible...
    Stretched lines...

    Criteria - You had some nice lines in this...

    Vote: Criteria
    test
Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.

Share This Page

Users Viewing Thread (Users: 0, Guests: 0)