31.Outkast 1-0 Vs 32.Junio 1-0

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Nebz, Oct 5, 2003.

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  1. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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  2. 0u+k@$+

    0u+k@$+ J Budden=G.O.A.T & Im Gay

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    6.You are a Raper, what are your Motives? Who do u rape and why
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  3. junio sixnine

    junio sixnine hasta la victoria siempre

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    12.Describe your rise to power as one of the most notorious dictators in history-Cigma

    mmm....ima post b4 the end of the sox game
    gota go do some work and shit now
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  4. junio sixnine

    junio sixnine hasta la victoria siempre

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    im in a land of stupid weaklings
    people open their ears to hear me speaking
    cause i make their stupid ass understand shit
    unlike a baseball, i have to slowly underhand it
    and they believe im like the supreme being
    i tell em words and they follow me...they pray to me kneeling
    cause im the one they know who can offer help in their lives
    i told em theyll stop hiding at night and crying their eyes
    cause they sick of this run over land, they sick of suffering, and they want me to give em a hand
    well they made a mistake
    they didnt know that i would rise up and dictate

    cause first i got my arsenal of people
    whod kill anyone that betrayed my highness...im evil
    that scared the shit out of the community
    see, all they could do is follow and listen to me
    whose gonna stop me now, ive already squeezed in
    ive done my convincing
    these weaklings believed me and ive got my small power that overuled the rest
    today ive already cause 9 deaths, all bullets in the chest
    but just this land has got me sleepy with boredum
    i need to board up a meeting and tell my soldiers to sword up
    cause we gonna be the ones with power
    every hour we seized more miles of land, my revolution is now
    we managed to get all weaker and weaker
    till they followed me in their '86 sneakers
    and now i had enough to be eternally rich
    i have done what no other has ever accomplished

    but in all great tasks there is always an obstacle
    the other half of the world is concerned...my soldiers are repainting the swastika
    i thoguht about it, and came into the battle so fearless
    i told my soldiers to fight...closely look into the night peering
    theyll see the other half of the world approaching slowly and quiet
    prepare for a battle...the ultimate eternity riot

    at first we were losing all our men in the battle
    the others had weapons like mk2-rattles
    but thats when i told my men to flex their bicepts
    be men...weve taken so many down...and now they are next
    it worked out good cause we captured many of them and locked em
    we poured gas down their throats...threw a match down the esophogus
    we all stared at them choking and gasping
    we were all on the side line...sitting and laughing
    thats when the other side had to lie down and surrender
    but we seized their ass anyways...chopped them with a 12 foot blender

    ive won, the world is mine, i could do anything
    i could kill and get away with it, i could rape my sex slaves and shit
    i could line all the women up to kneel down and blow me
    i could make people love me when they dont even know me
    but thats when human nature hit
    ...i was like...oh shit...well
    i own the world and noone can tax me
    the worlds worst person will burn in hell
    and who is that? thats me
    i dont wana live with this guilt
    but i get my men and tell em get ready for your next kill
    and i told them the person that they will aim their guns to
    i closed my eyes and said go.....boom

    about 55 lines
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  5. 0u+k@$+

    0u+k@$+ J Budden=G.O.A.T & Im Gay

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    I lurk with shadows in the night,picking out my prey
    cute face, nice body...and thick around the legs
    i realize what i do is wrong, but i choose to go along
    & have em on the floor helpless b4 they knew what's goin on
    i started out with little girls,ive moved up to grown women
    invading their private place and i quickly explode in em
    and im off,their left screaming,cops wanna kno where i be at
    but the victims cant identify my face under the ski mask
    i sit at home,untraced,in comfort with my actions
    seems, terrorizing others...gives me satisfaction
    i might be sick..deranged,a menace to my state
    evil is building in me,im a tenant to this place
    sevon or eight,females a week i violate their bounds
    and even tho i love the feeling..shit..i hate the sounds
    for a moment,slightly,i feel human,
    and think this is pitiful, the shit im doing
    but i cant control the urges,when i feel the need to touch
    i can sense her trippin out like an addictive needle rush
    and everytime im on top the bitch im penetrating
    i flashback to my childhood and become devistated
    its then i realize,why i do what i did
    growing up a lesbian with an abusive father,its all i knew as a kid...
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  6. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    Over No Shows
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  7. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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    junio, you had a cool story.. hard topic in my opinion so I liked the fact you used it this week.. started off real nice.. the flow had a weird change in effect in some places... thought u could have made it a little more interesting.. but cool drop bro.

    outcast, now although u dropped much less the junio.. I was really feeling tha way u put your story together.. fresh flow to it an use of words. the story was detailed nice an the read went along smoothly. props this week on a nice drop.

    vote outcast..

    best of luck to you both.
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  8. SamGoodY

    SamGoodY trully inspired...

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    vote=out

    just a better verse, period.... junio's just seemed elementary in skills. flow was off, story line was simple, imagary was bland...
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  9. HighPawTheCyst

    HighPawTheCyst New Member

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    ok qualiity over quanity wins here, junio easy verse, hard topic, the 2 sort of eliminated each other, your flow was shaky and the verse was rather simplistic, rather opague to me, out, short and sweet you got talent, looking forward to seeing more, props to both though
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  10. Maddest of Men

    Maddest of Men Just Call Me Madman

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    Junio- You told a great story, I enjoyed, it had a great premise, but you never went in depth, your writing was good, but you never went into great detail. No emotions or anything were shown

    Outkast- You had a very indepth story, with a very simple and short plot, and a great little ending. I could picture myself in the rapists body, and state of mind, and therefore, I award you my vote.

    VOTE=OUTKAST
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  11. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    vote=outkast

    definitely had the better verse...Junio's drop was plain and not creative or innovative...hardly any imagery or details to develop the topic...Outkast had some nice imagery and a nice flow and he developed the topic well...
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  12. SIN2

    SIN2 as we speak

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    vote=Out he had the better verse here...JU u did good but OUT verse kept me glued in...
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  13. Gummo

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    Vote: Outkast

    Overall better verse, Junio.. your verse was below average, I wasnt feeling it at all actually.. could have used a lot more effot and time i think, maybe its just because you havn't found your nithch, but stick with it, it will come. Outkast.. pretty simple verse, but you had all the aspects of a good verse in it, short and to the point, def. had enough to take the win. Good job to the both of you. G'luck in later rounds.
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  14. WiSDoM

    WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity

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    Junio, i gotta agree with most here..that topic was kinda hard to write about..ur the first one that ive seen do it so far..u held it down tho..flow was shaky at points..u could of done a lot better with it tho then what u did..seemed simplistic to me..and didnt keep me as intersted in reading..overall a decent verse..

    Outkast..that was enough to pull out the win for u...flow was on point..the content was really nice..first time ive seen u..didnt check u out last week..but hope to see more work from you man..especially if u put together a full story...got a lot of talent man..nice drop..

    vote = outkast


    *edited for bolding of the vote*
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  15. junio sixnine

    junio sixnine hasta la victoria siempre

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    yea...this is really like my first topical battle...i wasnt exactly sure on what or how to do this...it was also unedited and mad rushed cause i was gona watch the sox

    props to outkast...you deserved the win dogg
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  16. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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    it's cool that it's your first topical battle, we all started from somewhere, just keep reading. I liked your verse but you did lack a couple of elementary aspects of writing in general. Sometimes, for example, your rhymes didn't ...rhyme:

    swastika/ obstacle...nah.

    Also, try to write more like how you would talk, but don't forget to keep it in rhythm. Another problem was your flow. YOur lines were all over the place, try to keep them short and around the same length. that helps the reader and it helps if you want to spit this aloud. Text can help you in audio, people gotta recognize that...

    but although outkast's verse was short, and I believe it was better, he still needs to work on some stuff too. Short stories RARELY win...but in this case you lucked out. For future reference, try to expand and really investigate your topic. Pieces don't have to be long, but they can be detailed (two different things) like (1) if she's a lesbian, how's she raping anyone?! Of course she's probably using some type of devise, but you have to explain that.

    but all in all, Out did take this for me
    vote: outkast (oh, and change your name, duke. or at least change the spelling or something lol)
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  17. WHITETRASH

    WHITETRASH New Member

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    vote= outcast

    was good and i actually read most of it unlike stff i ususally do
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  18. Nebz

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    Outkast...wins
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