2triple0 vs I Am Bent

RULES & REGULATIONS

DEADLINES

[01] - The deadline for verses is Friday @ 11:59pm PST.
[02] - There are absolutely NO extensions under any circumstances. For this reason, It is unnecessary to request extensions. I apologize in advance.
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VOTING

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[09] - Votes changed after 1 hour of posting will be deemed a failure to vote.
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VERSES

[11] - All verses are to remain within the limits of 8 to 40 lines. Any breach of line limit must be agreed upon by both competitors prior to a verse being posted. Failure to comply will result in an automatic forfeit by all failing parties.
[12] - An agreement of a line limit will serve as the maximum allowed; competitors are allowed to post under an agreed limit, but never over. An agreement is not required. Upon failure to agree to a line limit, the second competitor is thereby required to meet the limit set by the first competitor to post.
[13] - You must not edit your verse once your opponent has posted, who in turn must not edit their verse after the first vote is cast.​

Checcing in

I bury 2triple, like a minute's left, call me Bob Horry
You're like Y 2 K, alot of hype for a non-story
Facing this pussy makes me sick, isn't my win obvious?
You just a witness to a sick spit like hungover gynecologists
It's probably just a bad week for you, I have to speak the truth
Expose the bitch in you, like Tuiasosopo tweetin you
I'm BEAT-in you, ram a headphone up ya ass, call it Dre's day
That reggie you smoke 'ron' to think you'll win this got you Kray Kray
2triple0, you trippin yo, I guess you're counting up the years
It's been since anyone's been whipped as soundly as this queer
You're getting fucked and you hate it, I'll leave you black and blue
Ask any rape victim, You'll wish for death when I'm thru attacking you

this my first battle in rbl im not interested in the victory
how bent even in this league a murder its a complete mystery
two lines and i already cracked the case wide open
you didnt have one nice bar bemt should stick to another sub-forum
sorry to destroy your dreams im just trying to have an ill battle
fuck your sleeping pattern i dont need to stay awake to hear u rhyme syllables
your not an intelligent voter bents always rooting for the soreloser
you drop pices that remind me of vagina hole u stay wriring horrorcore
work on ya shit homes we can all tell by the way u flow ur struggling
fuck this anyways id rather find me a honey with tits so i can start to learn juggling
you dont really express yourself im having trouble understanding your verse
how you planning to merk me when none of bents lines werent even close to superb

Bent
I bury 2triple, like a minute's left, call me Bob Horry

Sports references are played out, but this one was decently relevant and a personal name flipping, somewhat clever, decent opener but its just a 1 liner punch

You're like Y 2 K, alot of hype for a non-story

It rhymes, its true, another standard nameflip, nothing special

Facing this pussy makes me sick, isn't my win obvious?
You just a witness to a sick spit like hungover gynecologists

Dude, this makes no sense, in the set up, pussy makes you sick, which you could've used better I suppose, but then you say he's a witness to a sick spit like hungover gynecologists, would the patient be witnessing the sick spit of the gyno, not vice versa? Either way the flow is off badly and you lamely reused the word sick without altering meaning

It's probably just a bad week for you, I have to speak the truth
Expose the bitch in you, like Tuiasosopo tweetin you

If you're going to use current references, do them perfectly or not at all, the rhymes were lame, maybe since you used the "a" sounds first, say, "expose the *damn bitch in you, but it ain't that tuiasosopo
ag tweetin you" and again with the using the same words to rhyme...


I'm BEAT-in you, ram a headphone up ya ass, call it Dre's day
That reggie you smoke 'ron' to think you'll win this got you Kray Kray

The dre beats line was just good enough to not suck, but I don't get the connection
Is Reggie Ron kraykray's real name or something? Who is kraykray?

2triple0, you trippin yo, I guess you're counting up the years
It's been since anyone's been whipped as soundly as this queer

Good multis, cleanly delivering with smooth flow, and if, and only if, you were referring to Jesus being the last beating this bad 2000 years ago, I give you props


You're getting fucked and you hate it, I'll leave you black and blue
Ask any rape victim, You'll wish for death when I'm thru attacking you __________________


The rhymes were decent enough, flow faltered, and this is just violent and mean, not really a punchline, bad closer, could've tied it to the gynecological witnesses to tie the victim/witness bits together, but still, this was a very lackluster verse overall


this my first battle in rbl im not interested in the victory
how bent even in this league a murder its a complete mystery

Alright opener, nothing great, goog flow though


two lines and i already cracked the case wide open
you didnt have one nice bar bemt should stick to another sub-forum

That barely rhymed, but good coonection to the last punch and a decent personal


sorry to destroy your dreams im just trying to have an ill battle
fuck your sleeping pattern i dont need to stay awake to hear u rhyme syllables

Again, barely rhymed, but good connection, I can consider this an ok example of set up and delivery


your not an intelligent voter bents always rooting for the soreloser
you drop pices that remind me of vagina hole u stay wriring horrorcore

Again with the barely rhyming, I'm going to assume you're British and your accent makes it work, hopefully, regardless, punchwise these lines sucked, but the flow is still somehow on point


work on ya shit homes we can all tell by the way u flow ur struggling
fuck this anyways id rather find me a honey with tits so i can start to learn juggling

Sorta humorous, straightforward, and you actually rhymed! Yay you!


you dont really express yourself im having trouble understanding your verse
how you planning to merk me when none of bents lines werent even close to superb

You could've made this a solid closer with something like "when none of your *punches ever landed or hurt" see how it rhymes so smoothly with *trouble understandin yer verse...


Vote:2triple0, edged it out with a couple better punches, less mishaps, and an overall smooth flow

IAmBent = 0 point(s)

Good:

- You're like Y 2 K, alot of hype for a non-story
- Expose the bitch in you, like Tuiasosopo tweetin you
- 2triple0, you trippin yo, I guess you're counting up the years

Bad:

- You just a witness to a sick spit like hungover gynecologists (this seems forced and made no sense)
- I'm BEAT-in you, ram a headphone up ya ass, call it Dre's day (this seems forced, how does 'Dre's day' relate???)
- That reggie you smoke 'ron' to think you'll win this got you Kray Kray (maybe it's me, but this made no sense)

2triple0 = -1 point(s)

Good:

- sorry to destroy your dreams im just trying to have an ill battle
- you dont really express yourself im having trouble understanding your verse


Bad:

- how bent even in this league a murder its a complete mystery (poorly written)
- you drop pices that remind me of vagina hole u stay wriring horrorcore (forced, doesn't connect and too random)
- fuck this anyways id rather find me a honey with tits so i can start to learn juggling (you bodied yourself, here...NAGL)

Vote - IAmBent

Notes:

IAmBent - more direct lines at your opponent, try to minimize the forced word-play.

2triple0 - typos can hurt you in a text battle...presentation of the words is most important here IMO

Take care y'all!!!

Votes:

1. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-...6940-breathlesss-vs-gr8-whyte-hype-1-1-a.html

2. http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-...44-1-sonny-daze-2-0-vs-2-liquidity-1-1-a.html

Sorry, at work and no time to really break it down...

IAB, I thought you had some decent concepts that were connecting. I think wording was somewhat weak in general and that gynecologist line was bad.

2triple0, I didn't like your verse that much really. I wish you could have had more wordplay, maybe a little more wit.

vote IAB

IAB wins