21.Sin2 3-0 Vs 22.Peepers 2-0

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  1. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    21.Sin2 3-0 Vs 22.Peepers 3-1

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  2. ..::Peepers::..

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    sup man

    thx nebzer for correcting my record...
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  3. SIN2

    SIN2 as we speak

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    g'luck.......i'm hea
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  4. ..::Peepers::..

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    9.you have just jumped off a skyscraper and you are plummeting towards the ground... what's going through your head?



    Gusts of wind messing with my hair growing thin
    Glaring at a view without even a grin, the sun's gettin dim
    Look down my feet, below them lies only the street
    200 floors down, concrete and my face will soon greet
    A shriek "He's gonna jump, someone save that man!"
    My coworkers have an heroic plan, offer a helping hand
    But damn, they won't be in time, soon i'ma be outlined in lime
    Ok it's time, i gotta do what i promised myself, in order to shine

    *Jump!*

    Eyes closed, just enjoying the rush of air to my nose
    That view's replaced with my toes as my feet have rose
    Above my head, i'm ready to dive straight into that sewer grate
    Minced meat for the rats to have a great feast of 'brain cake'
    For god's sake, why didn't i do this earlier to end my pain
    My boss's a dick, wife places strain on me, plus i'm goin insane
    Its like the weight on my shoulders is making me fall at a faster rate
    Even if i dont get older, people might remember me after this date
    I'm in the middle age stage with no use for my last days
    Life's been a waste, i shoulda enjoyed it more by gettin more lays
    Now the women i loved is annoying as fuck, and i'm stuck
    My job sucks, coworkers below me make more bucks
    After all these thoughts go through, i'm still falling fast
    Tears are being sucked from my eyes because of my past
    These'll be my last, i'm bout to crash near a parked car
    Flipping my scarred body to stare into the burning sun from afar`
    Now corporate america's been declaring ignorance to oppression
    They glare into the eyes of evil and claim no aggression
    A lesson a blessing neesds to be learned by everyone
    We should look to the sun, a perfect being with no need for a tounge
    I'm done, ground's approaching fast, my life's already flashed
    This wont hurt, cause i wont feel dirt and brains mix after this act


    New Reporter:
    *As the stuntman plummets towards the inflatable land
    Rolling cameras capture it all with the slight of hand
    Oh No, the plan's gone wrong! he's just hit the street hard
    What a retard, he probably didnt pull the string for his last guard*

    "Gasping for air, i can't catch a breath from anywhere
    I'm losing oxygen, i'm not ready to die, this isn't fair...."

    Narrator:
    The stuntman wasn't paying attention as he fell to his demise
    He was lost in thought and forgot about his oxygen supplies
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  5. SIN2

    SIN2 as we speak

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    15.You are in a battle, and the other guy already spit and he ripped shit. You on the other hand are clueless of whats going on...your mind becomes numb and theres bets on you to win. You choke and leave the stage. The people that bet money on you are after you and ready for you to meet your demise...what happens?...expand...-Known


    Ayo

    let me get str8 to tha facts*nurse check stats*
    it all happened 2 fast...i couldnt react

    One day as I passed thru,my usual back route...
    on track to...tha Lab..wit my pens note pad my raps 2
    i notice a circled crowd,hyper in gulfin a cypher
    bein a rhymer..i figured i'd take a listen
    mcz mood shiftin as tha battle pace quickend
    faces glistened wit sweat tricklets
    they kept spittin
    i was jostled thru tha crowd..yet gained my positin
    wit attention i witness 'dude' rippin all compitision
    so y dont i step up and start flippin?
    tha peeps that know SIN beggin me
    bets on me,tha temptations is edgin me
    and from tha crowds reaction...i can take em alledgedly(sp)
    no sweat i think....peeps credit me respecfully
    wit no regrets or 2nd guess i planned...tha next was me
    its discription...should i mention to no suprise..
    black backpack skull cap to match that covers its eyes
    thru its expression i detected focus and pride
    no joke when it spoke...u just hope to stay alive

    ......."WHO NEXT UP TA GET MAULED
    ........U BITCHES GETTIN 'FUCCED I'M THA TOP DOG' "

    Thats my call...*nuse checks my pulse*
    stepped to tha center,cant stop or stall
    it knew me and bout my clout wanted to stop it all
    it flew off...multis...punches...pause...tha crowds in awe
    my face is on tha ground wit my pride and all...
    now nauseated my hands shaken,as my thoughts racen
    my determentaion is wasted...how can i take this...
    its no way shit...i know my weight wit it..
    this battle i aint won...chances take it...slim to none..
    tha crowd dont see yet...catts got my tounge...
    and it aint done...


    ITS ON U DUNN


    yo..........yo......yo
    shit i dont know...where tha hell my bars go
    choke artist?..i guess so...thoughts r slow
    tha pressure is buildin....i really cant explain this feelin
    like tha clouds closed....and the rain crept
    the pain in my chest...felt like death in every breath
    my brain just...shut down and left-
    me by myself...to get embarrassed and delt
    stomachs tight,apendix bustin status...
    and all this while...tha crowd has no reaction.
    beat in tha back ground blastin...u could hear feet tappin
    10 secs....chattin some laughin...
    20 secs passed..now that laughter is madness....
    30 secs later...i really dont know wat happeded...
    lotta shit talkin and harrassin....that led to actions..

    uhh

    i'm now in a battle 4 my life
    angry mob surrounds me....darkens my light
    hella smart remaks direct like.."I thought u was nice-
    on tha mic,but u lost 2night..and so did i,so u gotta pay tha price"
    swift i was hit wit...sticks---fists...bricks...knives
    and this is wat i get 4 not rippin it right?
    fuckin rip off u ask me....BASTIDS
    but they aint askin....my face got smashed in..
    i ended up in a trashcan...
    next mornin tha trash man...saved me on my last strand-
    of life left b4 i was a dead man...


    Bein in this hopital is critical....but i had to move
    so i wouldnt get rediculed
    i had to dead that.....i sit thinkin of punches..wit my head wrapped
    i luv rap....next time i'd be more logic and therrel(thorrough)
    cause it really sucks....to lose a battle to a girl

    g'luck(HAPPY BIRFDAY ME...10/7)
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  6. ..::Peepers::..

    ..::Peepers::.. New Member

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    glad you showed, thats a long ass peice, lmao

    votes time
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  7. Pro-deuce

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    kinda tough to vote on this one,
    but i vote for Peepers...
    verse had nice structure, good flow and lines were perfectly pieced together like contruction blocks. the verse itself was kinda simple, but the twist was cool in the end.
    Sin2's verse was shaky, hard to follow and a little tough to piece events together. really simple but had flow. although u had better imagery in this battle because u made it easy to picture exactly what was going on. it also reminded me of 8mile a lot...
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  8. prophetional

    prophetional hokey muh-fuckin' pokey

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    sin2 just killed it... that verse was just by far better then peeps seemingly choppy flow in every aspect. i believe in this thread, peeps was just outclassed from every angle. not to take away from him but sins flow here was smooth as crisco, creative on the wordplay and rhyming, and story was thorough... like prego, it was in there...

    vote=sin2
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  9. SIN2

    SIN2 as we speak

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    good...1-1
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  10. Nu-SeNsE

    Nu-SeNsE WHERE THE $$$'S COME FROM

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    vote sin

    reason being peep ithink u tried to make ur piece flow to much and therefor it knocked it a bit still a nic verse but i didnt like the way u ended it....

    sin- thought ur verse have excellent imagery and flow was aight...

    both had nice wordplay and stayed on topic well but 4 me sin just edged it.....keep reppin guys...good shit...
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  11. Spy2

    Spy2 BlahBlahBlah -MostRappers

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    This is a pretty hard one to call, peeps wasn't all that choppy, as some peeps have said (haha), but the twist wasn't too believeable, and the death... oxygen supply? If it was an actor doing his own stunts maybe, like, if he was trying to stay in character, but a stuntman doesn't need to stay in character... so he would be thinking about other shit. I guess the holes in the story kinda held it back...
    Sin's verse flowed better though regardless. The style's not what I like, but I can't let that bias me, story was told in more of a comical nature, so the stretches of imagination can be overlooked more...

    Vote: Sin
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  12. ..::Peepers::..

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    yes you can die falling from lack of oxygen, its a fact....
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  13. NAX

    NAX Bring the Pain.

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    the oxygen thing isn't the point though.

    sin had a pretty good story i guess. he took the topic and flipped it to its simplest extent. flow was choppy at times, some words didn't rhyme together, but for the most part this was a pretty average piece, imo.

    peepers had a good storyline. a stuntman performing a stunt off a skyscraper, getting entangled, not in the cord, but in his actual thoughts. teeting on whether he wants to die or not in his head, he's hit rock bottom, and before he realizes it he literally did hit rock bottom, and in his last milliseconds before death realized he in fact didn't want to die.

    pretty good plot, but the storyline was wayy too short for me. needed more. but the storyline was developed enough for his to pull out the win imo.

    vote = peepers.
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  14. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    Over No Shows
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  15. SIN2

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    stop swayin....UPP....TRAP i hope that aint a bias vote....since my comment in hook-ups......r y in the league?
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  16. SamGoodY

    SamGoodY trully inspired...

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    vote=sin..

    i really shouldn't even have to explain this one... but, his verse was better in every aspect of a verse...
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  17. SIN2

    SIN2 as we speak

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    if TRAP aint in tha RSTL....vote count

    4-1...if so 4-2
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  18. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    i thought this was a pretty decent battle...

    peepers: liked the twist at the end, your verse had an alright flow but kinda drug on in the middle...no real creativity to keep the story running...

    Sin2= liked the detail and imagery of your verse...flow was just sick...and i thought you developed your topic a whole lot better than peepers did with his...

    vote= sin2
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  19. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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    hmm... im not understanding how some of you saying this was thrown one way in every aspect.. ill tell u how I see it..

    peepers been around in tha league for quiet some time now and I know his style.. as in this verse he got very descriptive with the wording assuring that the reader can get into the story better. some of the choice of words i didn't like, such as the brain cake thing? but you kept the story moving along an didn’t let up. i have to say i wasn’t to impressed with the plot of your story.. it was kind of confusing the whole running out of oxygen shit since that’s seldom seen… overall i think this wasn’t one of your better story’s but still a good drop.

    sin.. from the overall stand still of this your story was def more simplistic, plot an all... the flow threw me off at times seeing how it changed on an off in weird places. But i do admire writing that is original in flow aspect even if the story was bland. i would have to say you kept my attention more then peepers plot an your ending about losing to a girl was kind of unexpected which I liked..
    this was sorta hard for me to choose a winner cuz both have different things i like about the verse..

    but im a fan of originality an i never seen an ending about dieing from loss of oxygen. the description made you story more complete in my opinion.

    vote peepers.

    best of luck to you both.

    best of luck to you both
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  20. NAX

    NAX Bring the Pain.

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    its not a bias vote. its a truthful one.
    and i don't know what your talking about, the hookups comment?

    if i replied it was more then likely sarcastic as usual. pce.
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