2 Poems-- A Dreams Secret, In My Direction

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  1. M-theory

    M-theory Saint Esprit

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    I wrote these two poems a while back. Jusdt decided I'd post them here for readers.

    A DREAM’S SECRET
    They say age is nothing but a number,
    But that’s not true to me,
    Love’s an everlasting dream,
    But it differs in its means,
    You can fall in love at any age,
    And you’d do anything to keep it,
    But when the time comes you’ll understand,
    Love’s an underlying secret,
    One day I will fall in love again,
    I’ll be happy to believe it,
    The dream I’ve been waiting for,
    Will she trust me to keep a secret?

    IN MY DIRECTION

    If I stared in your direction would you stare back?
    If I smiled would you smile too?
    If I spoke from my heart would you believe me?
    If I told you a secret would it remain?
    If I kissed you, would you kiss me back?
    If I asked you to be my girlfriend would you say yes?
    If I went on a journey could I take you with me?
    If I gave you a ring would you wear it?

    If you gave me a ring I’d wear it,
    If you went on a journey I'd go with you,
    If you asked me to be your boyfriend I’d say yes,
    If you kissed me I’d kiss you back,
    If you told me a secret I'd keep it a secret,
    If you spoke from your heart I’d believe you,
    If you smiled I’d smile too,
    If you stared in my direction I’d…
    Smile,
    Speak from my heart,
    Kiss you,
    Ask you to be my girlfriend,
    Take you on a journey,
    And give you a ring.
    test
  2. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    i liked the second one the best...In my direction..i have never seen that kind of style before and i liked how it was set up...i also liked ur wording...it was like that butterfly feeling as your reading it , hoping that everything will go the way u dreamed...very good emotion and detail...u got skills...keep writing...~one love
    test
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    pretty nice stuff didnt know you wrote poetry. Thanks for sharing

    one luv
    test
  4. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    were u listenin to 21 questions wen u wrote the 2nd poem? thats wat it kinda reminded me of, liked how u changed it to wat u wud do for the girl too.
    the first one i liked better, jst cos it had a simple hope about it, if that makes any sense. pz.
    test
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