19. God Extensions 1-0 Vs 20. Papa Smurf 1-0

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Nebz, Sep 23, 2003.

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  1. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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  2. NAX

    NAX Bring the Pain.

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  3. Papa_Smurf

    Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi

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    lol Trap you're crazy.

    I'm in, Topic : A conversation with God

    Look for some good shit from me.

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  4. Papa_Smurf

    Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi

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    Papa comes with that Fiyah!

    ... Where am I? What's going on... What is this place...Why's it so bright... Whoa... Hey!

    "Quiet my son, you ask so many questions"
    "You've been brought here, in defense of Human kind's presance"
    Defense? Defending what? What is this a trial or something?/
    "Call it what you wish my child, I can no longer sit idly by and do nothing"
    "There's been to much untimely death, humans breaking my laws"
    "I see now my own mistakes, and the fact that you all have your flaws"
    "But too much has been defiled, people worshiping the Devil with interest"
    "This is not what I wanted for the beings I have givin mine own image"
    Not everyone is like that God, Allah, What should you be called?/
    "I have no name in human words, for that too would make me flawed"
    "For the only mistake I have ever made in existance has been creating your kind"
    "And I am ashamed to admit to the Universe in all it's splendor that you are mine"
    But we can change! "It's not an option now, you all must now be judged"
    We can be different! "My mind has been made up, and the trial will go forth as such"
    "My name has been defiled, my own son slaughtered, and still I've shown forgiveness"
    "But too much now has gone on in this world, that I acredit to your existance"
    "Look at the planet, the planet I blew life into with my lungs"
    "Look at the tree's and water, the sky, the animals, including the slugs"
    "Everything created for a just cause, but so many animals now extinct"
    "Because humans would rather act for self pleasure, rather than think"
    "Everything is decaying rapidly, humans are mammalian parasites"
    "That even kill each other, over man made laws, and land rights"
    But Lord! I swear to you things can be different, we can be better/
    "The fact of the matter is, I believed it too, but now I know it will happen never"
    It can happen! I know it can! "Ha! Because you are so much smarter than I"
    "Because you, who too sins every day, is not telling your creator another lie?"
    "Because you, who never goes to church, to worship me, claims people can change"
    "When it was you, who doubted me for all these years, in his miniscule brain?"
    I know I doubted! I know I didn't believe, I know I was athiest, but I believe as I bleed/
    "As You bleed!? Not from your hands and your feet, like Jesus did in his time of need"
    "You're no better than Judas, in fact you're just as ruthless, you'd stab humanity in the back"
    "You'd give up the entire world, if you could have everything back"
    That's not true! I'm not so heartless, I understand I made mistakes in my life/
    "Of course you did, but you didn't ask for forgiveness as you died on the knife"
    "You're the last death, that I am accepting from the malice of men"
    "It's time that I set things straight, that I set wrong, bring this world to an end"
    But God! I know they can change! The people I love, let them live in peace!/
    Some day, I know some day, there will no longer be death in the streets/
    Some day there will be no drugs, or a need for the such, but we have to advance/
    But how in the universe do you expect us to change, if you don't give us the chance?/
    "Give you the chance!? The chance!? I've given you millions, and still you ask for more"
    "Even right now, a chinese man in your neighborhood is being robbed in his corner store"
    "Thou shall not steal! That was a commandment I sent to Moses, one of only 10"
    "Only 10 rules, to follow, but as humans of course you all choose to disobey me again"
    Is there anything I can do? Anything I can do at all to change your mind?
    "I doubt there is anything in this universe that will stop me from ridding your kind"
    What if you sent me back? Back with your words of knowledge to give to my people/
    Tell them of your plans, and to change their ways, to rid them from their evil?/
    "My son it's not that simple, your people will not understand, they will hate you"
    "They will call you a liar, thus is the nature of humans, and that's their fate too"
    All I need is a sign! Something to show the non-believers that you exist!/
    Then they will believe me, they will change, they will open their closed fists/
    They will stop the hatred, stop the death, stop the stealing, and stop the dealing/
    They will open up to you God, with their souls, their sins, express their feelings/
    "I don't think..." PLEASE GOD! Give me this chance! Allow me to help them please!/
    I can proove to you, that we are much more than just a simple disease!/
    I can change the world, I can fix these problems, I swear, all I need is your help!/
    "Fine, but you are your own last hope, if you fail, they all fail, so suit yourself........"



    Oh my God! He's awake! Someone get the doctor! Someone for the love of God get the doctor! He is breathing again! Papa! Papa!.........

    ((Edited to make the words smaller))
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  5. Papa_Smurf

    Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi

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  6. NAX

    NAX Bring the Pain.

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    a baltimore state of mind, this state is mine.
    chill - recline - relax ya mind & you'll find ...

    ... im in a state of grace, this place - my state, erase,
    all the hatred of race, im taking you face 2 face,
    with the big M-D ... to drama we ain't a stranger,
    all that blahzay blah is danger,
    bmore'll straight up re-arrange ya,
    from cherry hill, you know the drill - all the drug spots,
    that keep the cops locked, the corner crop,
    chop-shops ... what the bloodclot,
    we rock knots, from woodlawn to patterson, we splatter men,
    cuz life is fuctd up, the streets'are bound 2 make you mad again,
    in battiling ... we rattle them regular joes,
    fuck them bammas from d.C - and still fuck a mayor schmoke,
    from pratt to MLK - bmore is ballin everyday,
    with times in disarray - we still hustlin to make our pay,
    and make our way - tipsy, drunk at fells point 2 the harbor,
    stumble in the wrong alley & get cut-up like a barber,
    these streets'll harm ya - murdahland - the east coast pakistan,
    do you believe ?
    apparent grams to grands in the palms of hands,
    giving props where they're deserved, haters get on my last nerve,
    rep yo city, cuz you'll get merked, whether you be serving them birds,
    or cheering them birds, this city has a natural passion,
    in tune 2 whats fashion, whether you be rapping or acting,
    bmores ground zero, the world trade stands strong in our name,
    covering those heroes who shouldn't shelter the blame,
    we take it in vein, but strive 2 remain atop the rubble,
    section 8, death in our city is the only constant struggle,
    and nothing is subtle ... bmore'll stay around by leaps & bounds,
    fuck a rebuttle - deep down who else can say they love their town?


    but lets bring it back to the essence ...

    remember back in the day, charm city - reppin hard w/ ya crew,
    three of you, 12 years old ... didn't even have a clue,
    on how this world works, and how lifes so bezerk,
    through it all, we'd all still play ball in woodlawn after church,
    chillin out on the steps, waiting for the ice cream man,
    hear that song, run along, asking pops for money than ...
    ... fuck ya new shirt up, tiptoe back in the house,
    hide that shit in the hamper, case moms flips out,
    me and my boys in patterson park, late after dark,
    this was 89' though before the violence did start,
    shit was still grimey though, and i mean that literally,
    people'd let they dogs on the steps, they'd shit + pee,
    ruined the playground for all, but we'd let that slide,
    hop on our bikes, glide down eastern ave and ride ...
    through highlandtown, only place where we felt somewhat safe,
    'til some punks stole our bikes, shoulda watched ... cuz fate,
    stole the one thing that gave us our independance,
    now we run around town with that same resentment,
    always chill at our homes, playing nintendo, never change,
    kung-fu and super mario bros was our favorite games,
    ate at each others homes ... got two meals at once,
    ran out the front door ... screaming "fuck our par-ents",
    those were the days, went from great to absolute zero,
    and gi joe and optimus prime were our action-heroes,
    now that im older, i can see it in my sons eyes,
    the excitement and enlightenment of playin' w/ the guys,
    when he gets to that point, i'll explain to him cuz,
    and both reminesce on how fun both our lives was,
    through the grit and crime, dog - its hard to find,
    a spark in the true art in a bmore state of mind.

    baltimore, murdahland, harm city forever. believe that.
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  7. Papa_Smurf

    Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi

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    Nice post Trap, I can feel what you're sayin cause I live 2 blocks away from Patterson Park / Eastern Avenue.

    Lets start the voting.
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  8. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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  9. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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    i enjoyed both storys.. smurf ya story was nice.. followed along an stayed consistant with it. trap.. on the other had brought a little more interesting story to the tabel. kept me intertained most the way through.. now i know more about baltimore. flow was also good.

    good storys guys.

    vote trap

    best of luck to whoever wins.
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  10. WiSDoM

    WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity

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    Smurf, never peeped ya before, and u did surprise me..felt this story throughout..had some nice lines in it..flow was on point..consistent lyrically..overall a nice verse...keep it up.


    Trap on the other hand...his story was def dope...never really seen a story written like that..in a way it was simple...but that was the whole point of it..simple lyrics that provided a big point..if u get what im saying lol...really nice verse right here...dope battle fellas..


    vote = trap
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  11. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    This was a dope battle, but I was feelin Smurf's verse better...had the better flow, nice multis here and there and it was also strong lyrically, vocab-wise....also had the better imagery...

    vote= Papa Smurf

    Nice battle
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  12. Tha Talent

    Tha Talent , Tha Master.

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    Trap had far better imagery, i dunno what Den-S is talking about
    Trap really let me get the vibe of Baltimore - a city i've been to only 3 or 4 times
    the second part of his verse was fire.

    Papa Smurf:
    i just wasn't feeling it
    not into dialog pieces like that
    and it wasn't particularly witty and it didn't have an amazing flow
    so it didn't keep me interested

    vote=trapeezy
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  13. Gummo

    Gummo New Member

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    v: trap

    papas verse bored me actually, almost didnt even finish, no hate just how i was reading it.. trap.. not a very good verse either, but you did relate to the topic better and i think you got your point of view across.. bla
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  14. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    Papa and God both Win

    Tie
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