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  1. mr.redeyez

    mr.redeyez Member

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    Temptation, got my heart race'n
    beat'n fast, i need cash..paper chase'n
    i slash tha mota like jason, just to ease my mind
    my eye's squint like i'm asian, which mean's i'm high
    i'm stress'n, think'in of way's to leave this oppression
    my life is depress'n, painful memories i try my best to repress'em
    i never had a daddy, to steer me in tha right direction
    so i'm untame, ma momma pray but i fight tha blessin
    i'm hell bound, nothin can save me
    i was cursed since birth, bitter -n- crazy
    i can't lie i got'a grudge against tha people who made me
    welfare livin' since i was sleep in my cradle
    minus well raise hell, poverty can be fatal....
    test
  2. sHoW uP

    sHoW uP New Member

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    This is dope, a little short. I'd have loved to see this develop into a full song with a nice hook. Real decent though. A few real nice lines there too. 9/10 in my opinion
    test
  3. katherine4

    katherine4 New Member

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    nice lines~
    test
  4. mr.redeyez

    mr.redeyez Member

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    good lookin on da feed back
    test
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