10. MC4Sight 24-7 vs 9. Sacrifice 15-2

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  1. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    Topics: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1025638
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  2. MC4SiGHT

    MC4SiGHT JOE COMMiSSO

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    Check. Check.

    Good Luck Sac.
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  3. SacriFICE

    SacriFICE TRUspeak

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    And you to my friend.
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  4. SacriFICE

    SacriFICE TRUspeak

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    The Love of My Life

    Any other day, would've been different but something gave
    I turned around and saw you, fixing a structured gaze
    Nothing made... sense, my feelings they stayed tense
    Revealing a grave tension... between us a strange message.
    The scene erupted, a couple shots, spleen is ruptured
    The bleeding punished, it doesn't stop... depleted functions
    The sweet assumption of needing someone to survive
    Had I not believed in that shit, I'd be alive...
    A sea of lies, they started a year in the past
    The darkness of fear in a mask, a spirit of blackness
    Hearing the active savageness pass in your voice
    Looking back at the results I just laugh at the choice
    -I made, the poise I stayed, the rejoice you gave
    when I told you I'd be the one to deploy the chains
    -of marriage. Anointed plain and careless, insane,
    embarrassed to say the mistake was an arrogant way
    of thinking I could control any situation in life.
    Amidst complacent advice I listened paying the price:
    The day that I died...

    The day I was born, again- explored and wrecked
    The forced effects of being torn into tortured flesh
    A morbid mess of organs, heart pumping more than blood
    Then I made my way toward a love, a sort of drug
    She had the eyes of an eagle
    a sweet and vibrantly feeble mind and an equal of mine it was
    lethal and blind
    A frequent decline of cares in the world, there was my girl
    Eyes like diamonds in the skies that glared at the world
    There was my girl... eyes; I swear they were pearls.
    Alive... something scary, a vibe that would rarely decline
    Preparing to climb that vine, so scarcely designed
    Precise, a canary with wings made of various things,
    layered with dreams, and hopes were the feathers
    A determined pleasure revoked by the effort to choke,
    and dismember the hope that kept the feathers afloat.
    The weather provoked the severed connections and showed
    that never does love remember the past. What lasts...?
    Just love's most destructive and desperate wrath.

    "The time is now?" - Her eye's about to fly the nest.
    "The time is NOW?" - She lies down inside her bed.
    "The time is now!" - I find out she lied and yes...
    The time is now, to die. Regret.


    A pen stroke, a slight dripping
    dripping like a liquid of pure venom and death
    A pen stroke, a trite picking
    of words listening, obscure whisperings... the flesh;
    broken like bones maintaining that structure.
    Why me, dearest girl? Never did I force you to...

    suffer.

    "The time is now?" - My eye's about to see the truth.
    "The time is now...?" - I lie down beneath the roots.
    "The time is now!" - She finds out my need for you.
    The time is now, to die. Regret.


    A plain and perfect maze of nervous shame
    The same returned, a gaze that burned.
    A flame that churned and raised internal pain.
    A circle made from a halo's golden wire
    It controlled desire, the angel's wings...
    exposed within a lonely fire... what days can bring.

    She said to let the words speak, and they spoke to me,
    Told me that I'd only become what I hoped to be...

    nothing.

    Between the lines, she said read... between the lines
    I focused between the lines, now it seems I'm dead... free.

    Heart of Darkness
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  5. MC4SiGHT

    MC4SiGHT JOE COMMiSSO

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    A Christmas Story

    This time.

    He was the asker, who had never asked for much…
    What’s their to ask for…when all you need’s too real to touch…
    And he hadn’t budged long enough to feel desires…
    So Michael wasn’t the type to inquire, he just wasn’t required,
    And though he admired others will to ask,
    His life attached to wires never latched a reason to bask,
    And he wore a mask of breath, at least what’s mechanically left,
    As Mom handles it less, and less, and less
    Yet as Christmas neared, his ears tuned to the simplest…
    And as he managed a smile with his dimples in…
    He asked.
    Momma…momma…is Santa real? And gasped.

    This Time.

    Michael’s weak respiration, was a Mother’s prison.
    She had the wettest vision.
    But…but…but…she answered yes, with deep precision.
    “Yes Michael, he’s as real, as real as you or me…
    He’s as real, as real as love, even the kind you can’t see…”

    by now…she could’ve used her own breathing machine…
    As she wipes her cheeks clean with hospital sheets…
    She’s defeated, but for the life of her, she can’t let Michael see it…
    He doesn’t need it, no, no, no not now… not for Christmas…
    She’s wishes. She wishes. She wishes.
    She washes away…butterfly beauty devoured in dismay…
    It’s wasn’t always this way, she use to weigh Michael away…
    In her arms, he was her precious display.
    And she loved him, as much as any mother could say…
    She loved him. As much as she may.
    But…

    This time.

    Rewind was the only item etched upon Michael’s mothers list.
    He dreamt of Santa. She dreamt anger, and wept with fists…
    Consumed with why’s and what if’s…
    And Michael, he hadn’t ever been the type to ask for gifts…
    Didn’t feel it was his task to get,
    Presents unwrap a few smiles, but what he asked unravels & lifts…
    All he asked was for someone to believe in…
    And he wouldn’t mind one bit, if that were to be all he gets…
    Michael’s mother sits, as she reads him to sleep this Christmas eve.
    As he asked one last time.
    Momma…momma…is Santa real? And heaved.

    This time.


    She was at the ease of debris, mentally that brought her to knee’s…
    Michael began to choke, and convulse rapidly…
    she screamed…
    “Yes Michael, he’s as real, as real as you or me…
    He’s as real, as real as love, even the kind you can’t see…”

    And these were the words she screamed…she screamed…
    The last words Michael would ever hear,
    Tears.
    They wore her face like a rainy day with no umbrella.
    They wore his last expression with a deep smile.
    He believed.
    He believed.

    This time forever.




    Topic: Mother May I?
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  6. SacriFICE

    SacriFICE TRUspeak

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  7. Baron Myzzle

    Baron Myzzle The British Guy

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    i think that 4sight really disappointed after last week. the verse was built up, seemed like it would be dope (and was for the first little bit) but it seemed he got rushed and forced an closing. sacrifice just seemed to be better all over, concept, flow, etc. were all above his opponent and i feel he got the win. 4sight can definately write, and if he had a little more closure to the verse this could have been a lot closer of a battle.

    vote sacrifice, sorry for the short explanation, merry christmas!
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  8. MC4SiGHT

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    Hmmm the verse was for from rushed baron, i wanted it to end how it did, theirs a huge underlying meaning. thanks for the vote though

    but my votes shall go here!

    merry christmas to all!
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  9. UneekTestimony

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    once again, this will be a quick vote because i'm on dial up..and we all know dial up sucks. sacrifice, cool verse...your imagery and flow was amazing as you vividly portrayed a man who suffered from being heartbroken. i mean, the content was on point and your writer's voice was maintained well throughout the piece. each stanza transitional wise was fluid. it was a good piece. mc4sight, not better than last week, but it was pretty good. the emotion definietly overshadowed other components throughout the piece and ultimately, ended up carrying the verse. although i do believe that i did, i felt that it didn't carry it far enough. sacrifice had a more solid display of all writing components, while mc4 had some more stronger than others. i just felt that sacrifice had the stronger verse this week. don't cuss me out.

    good battle. pz.

    v/sacrifice
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  10. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    thanks for showing... getcha vote on and Happy Holidays. I guess that's the PC term to use incase there's Jews and Muslims in the league
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  11. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    Sac - wow...this is probably the first piece from you that I was able to read straight through and actually enjoy...it held more of a poetic nature as the words flowed smoothly yet there was a deeper level behind it all...something that truly drew me in and allowed me to really enjoy this piece.

    4sight - simply put the emotion of this piece carried it completely...the imagery was there and I enjoyed it...honestly...against someone else the emotion of this piece alone would have carried it to a victory, simply on emotion and enjoyment factor.

    This week though I can't deny that Sac was only slightly behind you in emotion and imagery, but his mechanics and other aspects of writing shined far brighter.

    Vote = Sac
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  12. A.S.K

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    sac: first time readin u stuff i think and i really enjoyed it. the subject has been dne so many times so it was a nice suprise too find some1 who could do sumthing new with and keep me reading. I found i did struggle to get into it in the first verse but the flow, imagry and word structure of the second verse was just immense. the ending confused me a bit, but still a great piece. grats...

    4sight: jesus man u can write! the emotion in that piece was awesome, carried it right through. love how u gave such a strong writers voice to portray the mothers anguish. i personally loved the ending, how it all built up to end on a note giving a strong message. im gona keep what i think the meaning of it was to myself incase im wrong. but in my mind its brilliant

    vote: 4sight

    jst because i loved this style of writing tho sac did cocme excellently as well, so full props to both
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  13. Urizen

    Urizen I hate humans

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    ok this here was on nice battle after reading Sacs piece and just glancing at 4sights font I thought this was a dead give away but damn
    ok 4sight came real nice the emotion in this piece was just MAD nice I felt that shit
    the way the mother lied to the kid just to keep him happy as he dies
    DOPE but the this time repeating wasnt really neccesary but still a nice piece

    Sac this was a nice piece I liked the way you repeated certain parts gave the piece a extra effect it read away smooth what really stood out was your writers voice but all in all this was a nice battle but the emotion I got off 4sight's piece was just to much for the smooth reading from sac so
    4sight gets my vote
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  14. Shrug

    Shrug Street Poet

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    good battle sac took this one for me tho. even tho mc4sight had craaazy presence in this verse, emotion, rhyme everything, sac just took it. he had a great easy read that was enjoyable all the way thru. the multis were ill and strong.

    sorry for the short feed
    merry christmas
    Vote sac
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