1 Day Out of 365

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  1. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    Another day, another rhyme, two different cities, another time

    Kid in all black, with his pet bird, waiting to committ the crime

    Planning to complete his mission, with precision, at the drop of a dime

    Late at night, all lights out, only the bathroom was lighted

    The kid and his pet bird, waited until his Dad stepped out, and was sighted

    The kid's pet bird wasn't ordinary

    It wasn't Arabian, but it was from the desert, and carried heat, from the sun, with each and every feather

    Dad stepped out, the bird opened his mouth and shot lead

    2 in the chest, 1 in the head, everything was quiet, nothing was said

    The kid, and his Desert Eagle knew, that Dad was dead
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  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    damn this was short but was some deep shit. lol my slow ass didnt know you was talkin about a gun at first until you said "it was from the desert"
    creative shit...keep it coming

    one luv
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  3. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    yea i didnt catch that at first either, this shit tho kinda disturbed me tho i aint like the whole killin pops thing
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  4. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    Thanx for the responses.


    "i didnt catch that at first either, this shit tho kinda disturbed me tho i aint like the whole killin pops thingr the responses."

    **I'm sorry you found this disturbing, that's why i called it 1 Day Out of 365, because shit like this happens every day, like it or not.
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  5. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    hey yo, i think peeps need to give this more luv, i really liked this, real poweful,

    **I'm sorry you found this disturbing, that's why i called it 1 Day Out of 365, because shit like this happens every day, like it or not.
    ^^
    tru that.
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  6. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    interesting...not too shabby at all..caught me off guard b/c i have no idea at first where you were going with that whole bird thing. interesting indeed.
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  7. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i didnt like it at all at the begining...i was like why is this dude talking bout a kid with a pet bird.......lol...but then u took it somewhere else....shit was dope....ill lil concept u got here.....think u should try to make this a lil longer or something...nice drop
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  8. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    A different approach with a different way of twisting words around for a decent meaning. I found this to be a hard piece with a great concept after all, because I agree with lpoet, in the beginning I was like, "A pet bird?" But it was a nice drop, mos def.. My blessings..
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  9. Infonation

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    Thank you everybody, i'm glad you enjoyed it.

    ^One
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