07.08.04 Love......It Does

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  1. Sole Sovereign

    Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving

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    Love, is a vast topic to handle considering all the different opinions and views on it and whether it exists or not. I think that you made this piece real enough that 90% of your readers will feel you on it. Definately a worthy read.
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  2. quotive

    quotive 3

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    Feelin' the ABAB rhyme scheme, thats the first thing I noticed.

    "Love is risking your sadness
    n sadness is risking your Love
    Love can bring forth madness
    through the things it does"

    I was feeling that part.

    I'm not much of a loving person either, I'm anti-social, but love does deserve its credit! lol... Nice drop, stay around.
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  3. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    just got back in town, thanks everyone for replies on this, holla
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  4. 6th_plague

    6th_plague More then meets the eye

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    I liked this, its better than the first peice you dropped in the PTL. But you still seem to miss out on content for rhymes sake IMO... You deffinatly improved though... no doubt
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  5. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    yea good looks
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  6. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    bringin up so if no one has seen it they can before it goes bye bye
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  7. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    bringin back up from the gutta for anyone that aint see
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  8. New Born Alias

    New Born Alias Nu-nu or New Born

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    that was ill..aite main aite late
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  9. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    bringin this back up from god knows when, let me see some opinions on this after years
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  10. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Yes INDEED..I love this, you're saying so much in this piece. I can read this over & over realizing different things everytime. Love is def. everywhere in many forms than just one. Thanks for sharing
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  11. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    oh dang, my bad I just noticed the date on this. Mods going to be mad lol
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  12. AKIDO

    AKIDO My Spirit Has Awakened

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    I like this piece. It's something everybody can relate to. Very nice
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  13. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    sorrry to any MOD who gets mad, didnt read rules, havent been here for a while, my mistake...
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