07.08.04 Love......It Does

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  1. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    - Cant Resist. Read it
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    -Take it or Leave it

    in this piece I was trying to bring out just the relationships between things and Love.....I feel Love relates to everything and anything in the world....God died for us out of Love, and Love will always be present no matter how much violence and stuggle there is........a baby boy dies from a stray bullet in the middle of a ghetto....the mother struggles, but there is someone there to show her LOVE and support...Love is everywhere, theres no denying it, one Love, holla


    - Love.....It Does -


    Love is an addiction
    an addiction to Love
    Love has no predictions
    to the things it does

    Love is searching for happiness
    and happiness is searching for Love
    Love comes in unusually happenings
    in the way that it does

    Love is risking your sadness
    n sadness is risking your Love
    Love can bring forth madness
    through the things it does

    Love is taking those risks
    n risks you will take in Love
    Love is a bundle of trips
    through the ways it does
    test
  2. SAMARA

    SAMARA truth is a sword

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    everything and anything?

    I enjoyed reading this piece.
    test
  3. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    hope so, bring to the top
    test
  4. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    That was a nice little take on love, but are you giving love a little too much credit? Anyways I liked how you switched the last line up in each stanza, that was kind of nice. The whole piece flowed really well. nice piece


    Stay Up, Much Love, peace
    test
  5. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    good loooks, and no i feel Love desires alot more credit than it gets, my opinion, one.
    test
  6. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    love
    *wipes feet on welcome mat*

    ive been through some shit with love in my time..... I agree with you love does deserve more credit than it gets

    good piece

    and
    i really enjoyed how u went about this piece

    rep points one love dawg
    test
  7. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    ^ yea yea good looks short.....much love
    test
  8. Solitude...

    Solitude... I'm Back...!

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    it has a great flow to it and a seemingly honest heart-felt take on what you believe to be love, nice lil piece...
    test
  9. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    though short, it was precise. it consisted of exactly what you stated. Though, I think at times, love is over rated, yes, I too believe that love is connected to everything. Then again, I also believe that all things are connected in some shape, form, or fashion...good drop though...
    test
  10. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    dope lil piece rigth here fo sho
    test
  11. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    yea yea get at the boy
    test
  12. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    I'm not a big loving person to be honest, but I see where you were coming from with this. Keep it up

    one luv
    test
  13. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    thanks for the looks, one.
    test
  14. Wicked5744

    Wicked5744 Last I awoke, it was morn

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    I this because there's sort of a double thing going on here. You're defining it and giving a story behind it. This was good made me think....keep the ink flowin.
    test
  15. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    ^ good loooks man
    test
  16. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    bringin back up
    test
  17. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    reading this a second time

    i like it even more
    hope to see more from you in the near future

    peace out dawg..
    test
  18. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    yea good looks short, will be droppin more in a sec
    test
  19. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    that was official.....very expressive and to the point....keep it up
    test
  20. cool piece, and a very difficult subject to settle on sufficently and leave having captured what you wanted to in the way you hoped. Rainer maria rilke said that young people should stay away from the subjest of love as it takes a fully developed power to deliver to it what it deserves. But this was definetely a thought provoking piece and a beautifully simplistic dedication. Keep your head up

    onelove
    test
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