"0 Father Of Mine"

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  1. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    O Father Of Mine,
    May you forgive my sins
    And seek the truth within
    To divulge in prosperity, I begin
    And not confide in a people so dim.

    O Father Of Mine,
    May you look over my family
    Replenish the souls of my enemies
    Provide comprehension to those misunderstanding me
    Add knowledge to a life of little, intellectually.

    O Father Of Mine,
    May you cure the feasting envy
    Give strength to avoid those who tempt me
    Appreciate and love those who love me
    And respect society as a whole, though not independently.

    O Father Of Mine,
    May you serve and guide this life of mine
    Provide light and hope through the sight in these eyes
    Fulfill my soul with truth, weed out the lies
    Survive through the darkness, in hopes of brighter skies.
    test
  2. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    i liked the prayer feel this had....it sounds good too......nice lil piece man
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    think this would make a nice spoken word piece....i agree with feme sole the prayer feel was good

    one luv
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  4. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    thanx..upp
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  5. Den-S

    Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:.

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    uppp for more feedback...
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  6. TrufDXaggerator

    TrufDXaggerator New Member

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    Yea i feel tha same.Tightt how you a lyricist but didnt get caught up in the rhymes alone(im an mc too so i kno how hard it is)And you made yo self sound like your an intellectual rapper not so commercial.I call dis 'Poetry in Flowtion'.Keep it comin Jus Like Dat!
    Truthfuly Speakin and Truf Fully Spittin' OUT
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  7. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    i was feeling this
    nice piece
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  8. cazz81

    cazz81 New Member

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    really nice piece

    could offer the prayer up to the gods:p
    really good for real though
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