“Adoration’s Ebb and Flow”

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  1. Sole Sovereign

    Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving

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    Tooshort21 – Song that no one sings http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=772850

    Smoke Trail – Love .. It Does
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=9543667#post9543667

    Evg.poet – Sense-less emotions
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=761713


    “Adoration’s Ebb and Flow”​


    I sit and ponder my next demographic,
    no worries of slappin some mental addict
    no contemplation of hatred ending my sadness
    only thoughts of your heart strings and exploring their fathoms
    From a life of street eloquence,
    so cold without gladness
    Some might speak of decaying decadance,
    I can only preach ballads
    Inspite of the trappings,
    my freedom’s whimsickle when she’s tested yo
    Answered by lesser happenings
    I bleed on in my Adoration’s Ebb and Flow​
    test
  2. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    I won't say that I actually liked it, lol...well, I liked the rhyme scheme and the flow of the piece, but wasn't exactly feeling the whole concept. I don't know, maybe it's just me...Anyhow, I think it could have been longer to me, maybe that's what I was feelin about it. Sure it had depth, but it didn't exactly express to me what you were saying thuroughly enough...But, it's not bad...And welcome back to the realm...I can see by your join date that you've been here a while...
    test
  3. Sole Sovereign

    Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving

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    Yeah, first piece i dropped since my son died in 02
    test
  4. rhino_number_33

    rhino_number_33 RRRRROOOOOAAAAARRRR!

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    it was a good dedication piece, but it kinda confused me, but i get confused easily
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  5. quotive

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    The first two rhymes had me thinking it'd contain all multies... nah...

    It was cool though, rhyming "yo" with anything shows you have a pretty low vocabulary... Up the vocab man...
    test
  6. Sole Sovereign

    Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving

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    Appreciate the constructive criticism guys, but there's nothing lacking in my vocabulary. Go dig up a few of my open mic pieces from back in the day, i just chose not to sacrifice the feeling of somebody from the streets that really hasn't known anything eloquent and has now came into something above and beyond the hardness of what he's known. Sometimes when you just type and stop thinking... it feels good. Thanks again for all the comments, i'll be dropping another soon.
    test
  7. quotive

    quotive 3

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    No doubt yo. I'm just saying... you couldn't have thought of anything else that rhymed with "Ebb and Flow"?

    But none the less, it was cool. I'll go peep out some of your older work to see what your about. Hang around here though, we need more life. Stay up homie.
    test
  8. Sole Sovereign

    Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving

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    Thanks again.... yeah ill be around
    test
  9. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    hmm..i liked this..

    different

    very unique to the realm...couldnt really focus in one one thing and draw out on it..however had some nice lines in there..just didnt feel like they all went with each other

    anyhow...nice job and welcome to the realm
    test
  10. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Sorry to hear about your son. I think the piece was put together nicely. There were somethings I didnt get though. Hope to see more from you soon.

    one luv
    test
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