i liked this, alot - until;
when it arrives sometime in the year 2030
will we all die drastically from fires cast from underneath
pretty powerful stuff, he makes an effort and succeeds in moving the reader,
wealth is more than pressed elements
^that was pretty cool,
painted a nice visual for me- emphasizing what you're trying to say..
can you love somebody with all your heart
but not depend on them for your own happiness?
I think the answer is yes
if you are aware of the...
meh hes alright
he got a lucky drop on that one.
funny email i recieved.
don't Jay 'borrow' his material from everybody else?
What is beautiful to you, does not mean it is what you can have...?
looks are deceiving (one of my thoughts from the 1st stanza).
let me know what you don't like as well as what you do like. I'm not sure on the ending :|
props to Pac for "rose from the...
the drapes convulse in response
it all falls down
when the first brick deviates from the wall
her face was a million times the...
Ordinary white walls ambush me
Except there’s a wood stained oak,
Door that always leads me to freedom.
^loved those lines-- great imagery and...
this was really good, I liked it, a good "goodbye" poem,
i liked the title and the manner this was written in.
this was a good personal poem,...
Twas at the bottom of a beer
that I found a moment of clarity
"Virtue is for the burdened"
and the burdened suffer social disparity
its a catchy song,
if I were a girl, I might bump it, hah.
its basically about a girl I was dating, I blew it though, this poem reflects that.
if I fell into the empty sea
... would you follow me?
can I trust you with my soul
my presence wrapped in a gender role...
I gotta work tonight,
its the thorn in my side
constantly throwing venom in my eyes
it reassures me so
I'm just not good enough,
watch as my...
not a bad idea,
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