Damn I ain't been on for a while...but nicely worded but very lengthy. I can't lie...I didn't finish it. Keep postin'
your kids couldnt have a better mom.
aaahhhh...thanks so much u guys...i think their daddy and i just fell out after 8...
'blended nightmares over rocks and a glass of scotch'
^ i liked how that shit right there flowed 2gether. nice drop.
love the format and flow...very tight
I am Atlas walking into the depths of a sea of a mind where even the fish of mentality drown,
nicely worded...keep postin'...i hear ur emotion
heeey i like that...kinda flowed like some edgar allan poe
U guys, my 6 yr old lil girl asked me to write her a letter on here. She jus wanna see her name...lol...butta y'all really ain't gotta reply......
that was garbage
u wanna see real poetry. read mine.
lmao...thanks for the feedback...it's good to see ur working on extending ur vocab...that...
nice peice I can relate to the feel of being lost nice drop tho
are u serious? the first part was deep...but i did get *lost* true enough...when u...
It plunges back
Back into the depths of sorrow
Tortured by event of today
Greeted by hopes of tommorow
Thriving on promises
Promises made by the...
nice piece...was feeling it from begining to end..wish it were a lil longer though.....keep dropin
Yea...I wish my shit could be longer...
Physically corpsed but mentally healthy.
She lays motionless.
Yet her mind engulfed with memories as you speak.
Unable to move. Unable to...
Thanks you guys...that piece tho was one of those 5 min things...l was just feelin' the moment...again thanks for the replies.
I loved it...
i use there words to cover whats really me
a zombie whos heart doesnt beat
a man whos empty
Why am I lying awake at 4 in the a.m.?
Listening for the door knob to turn, wondering where my man has been.
I don't deserve this, I'm the mother...
Very deep. I love the flow and structure. But I've read your work before and have come to expect this.
It didn't just flow but if you don't know who u are just know u got talent.
That was tight. Yea, it sounded a lil like a hallmark to me also. But maybe you're just that good. Keep postin'.
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