When I leave they arrive,
And everything goes wrong.
They don’t understand my detachment,
Or why I walk
When I should run;
So they question my...
If something is cliche it obviously works; to become cliche it must be used a lot. so it becomes over done maybe, but if it works why rule it out?
i loved this piece. i didn't see it as a religious piece, but can understand how it was interpreted that way. the last two stanzas were probably what...
damn son.... a lot of emotion went into this piece, a lot of passion. you can feel it just by reading it.
it had a nice flow; but you didn't use...
thank you for the feedback. this one was a little different for me, i had a completely different inspiration; may i never lose it.
Your touch takes my breath away.
I love and hate the look in your eyes,
When you know my lips have emitted a lie.
And I can't look too long,...
i guess i was kinda holding back on this piece. i was going to rewrite it, but i decided to just write an entirely new poem with the same concept....
thanx for the feedback guys. this was a little different for me so it's nice to know it was enjoyed.
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i was really feelin this piece. the structure was different, but nicely done. you had some amazing lines in here. and each individual part had a...
In a kiss.
The purity of a rose,
And a lightening storm's grace.
The enchantment of a pixie;
An artist's passion
And a poet's will....
quotive and zero are right; the language, not exactly complimentary for the piece. but there was some real emotion, it seems that everything is...
i really liked this piece. lately i been wishing for place like this, so if you find it let me know, lol.
Too little things to do
Too much of...
i haven't posted in a while, thought i'd do something different from my usuals.
i loved this poem, I Was With Her Long Enough To Change Brands of Cigarettes, i was really feelin it. it wasn't deep, it was just good writing with a...
thanx for the compliments and criticism, i always welcome the latter.
and anaphora, love is contradicting most of the time, it always is for me,...
thanx shaft, always nice to get a compliment. but i don't know how brainy i am, lol.
Last night the rain poured down,
Like so many times before,
And though it was nothing more than warm rain,
It sent icy chills throughout my body,...
i loved the beggining,
I look at you looking at me
And this is what I see
The disgust in your expression
That I tend to embrace
reall liked this piece, felt this way just a little while ago. but it gets better, you just have to make yourself get out of the corner and stop...
this was tight, i would have liked it better if it were longer, but it was good short too.
I have forgotten the feel of the wind.
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