sorry.. i dont usually post out of the poetry section. i just happened to stumble over this verbatim verse. where do i post it?
DZK - Lucifers Entertainer
SoundClick artist: DZK - DZK is a rapper from the DC Metro area!
N.M.E. - Gutter Struck
While You Were Sleeping album...
Ya I use line breaks so it makes the pieces look longer, but if I were to have those in straight lines until punctuation it'd really be half the size...
Holy fucking shit
... I just posted up like a three paragraph break down and went to delete somthing and it all got erased. I'm about to through...
Ground connection to central
Fore; head the database.
Information races itself
To paint a blank cortex
With rhythm enigmatica;
I liked this piece alot. I haven't been around here in a while and this was definately a nice way to come back. I really loved the morbid twist of...
Wow, thanks alot to all of you who chose to read even a section of this. And misspimp... Lol that was a pretty useless comment, in the time it took...
Ya I know its super long, but I apreciate you taking the time to drop some feedback and read what you could.
Atticus - Regular
Mindless - Itallics
Under that black top hat
Stitched within its barers
Cause rests Uncle Tom,
And a delightful game
I looooooooved the emotion of this piece, it seemed very heartfelt and authentic to me. The only thing I diiiiiiidn't like was the tone of the piece....
I dunno, I just never really felt connected to the content, and in comparison to the other things I've read by you which I loved this just didn't...
Well, looks like this piece is about done... I'm leaving this site though, it's really slow for me so it takes forever to do anything on here (Why...
"The sands of us
Bound by blood.
Each droplet expired
To become one
Of piece in attire."
^^^ my favorite imagery in the poem
Ya, I can respect that... Sometimes you just want raw, everyday emotion. Sometimes I enjoy reading that, but for the most part my style is cryptic...
Thanks alot for the feedback, I apreciate it... If you've got a piece out i'll leave some feedback on it when I get out of school.
Wrap the sidewalk
Tall in fallen worlds.
Grip at a swinging
The sands of us
Thanks for the detailed feedback -Rolls Eyes-
Oh shit, I won? *Scratches Head*
Lol thanks alot to whoever voted for me. And congrats to everyone else who won this month.
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